This is an overall explanation of how to answer a very large proportion of HHD questions! [This is no complicated formula - it's just basic common sense]
So probably 60% of HHD questions are exactly this type:
Explain the impact of X [some factor or other]
on Y [some facet of health or human development].
You then answer the question by simple, logical reasoning, like this: X leads to ___ which leads to ____ which leads to Y.
(i.e. you state what X is and reason out how it then impacts on Y)
I like shorthanding answers with arrows, so it looks like:
X --> ___ --> ___ --> Y
For example:
Spending time in a children's hospital means that John cannot interact with other children and participate in his school community, reducing his social health.
Boils down to:
Spends time in children's hospital (X) ---> can't interact/ participate ---> poor social health (Y).
This is a very simple example, and in more complicated questions, you'll need a lot more links in between (it's really important to make sure that each arrow step makes sense and doesn't 'jump' leaving a gap; in this case, that would be saying 'spends time in children's hospital --> poor social health', where you don't fully explain how step 1 leads to step 2).
John, due to staying in the hospital for the past 3 weeks, has not been able to properly adjust to starting school. This means that John's mental health will be compromised as his learning will be delayed. He may also feel upset about missing out. John's physical and social health will also change as he cannot make new friends, interact with people his own age, or play with anyone.
So, relating this to your question:
Your answer is good, and you address all dimensions of health (great!) and definitely do the X --> Y thing. But to make it even cleaner, you could change the order so that it flows really, really clearly and logically.
For instance, you dump 'he may also feel upset about missing out'
after describing mental health (so the examiner has to 'guess' that you're saying it impacts mental health). The description would simply be smoother if your logic was carefully planned and you go:
As John can't go to school, he may feel upset about missing out, [could even put another step here linking to words from mental health definition], compromising his mental health.
Or in shorthand: Can't go to school --> upset about missing out --> poor mental health.
Similarly, you kinda skip a step when you say 'John's physical... health will change as he cannot make new friends...' This doesn't explain
how not making new friends will impact his physical health, so the examiner has to fill it in - and they won't give you marks for what they add in. Don't leave gaps in your logic.
P.S. Good answer though, I'm just theory-dumping
