VCE English Question Thread

[pmmenotes]

current english grades are 57% (creative) and 70% (lang analysis) do i have any chance of getting a 35 study score 😥 keep in mind im good at Medea essays/text responses have scored 8/10, 9/10 on practice ones

[zhen]

My SAC's have been like this 83%' 76% and  65% I know I have a lot of gooddamn potential but I'm just not practising enough and also make up excuses. My teacher always reassures my that I have a lot of potential and have the capability of getting 40+ . Some one help me to achieve this with my current sac scores and give me hope. I've promised myself to try harder for my next sacs. 

Percentages and exact SAC scores don't matter. What matters is your SAC rank. So, if you're ranked highly, then these SAC percentages don't really matter. If your school is like mine, we only have 6 SACs throughout the year, meaning that you've finished half your SACs. Assuming that your rank is above average but not excellent scores (which would be standard for those types of marks), then it's definitely still possible to get 40+. As long as you ace the rest of your SACs and the exam it's definitely possible. That said, it'll still be very difficult, but it's definitely doable.

current english grades are 57% (creative) and 70% (lang analysis) do i have any chance of getting a 35 study score 😥 keep in mind im good at Medea essays/text responses have scored 8/10, 9/10 on practice ones

Like I said above SAC ranking is what matters, not percentage. Right now it looks like you're getting average SAC marks (That's about average at my school, so I'm assuming that it's the average at your school). But you've still got 4 more SACs to improve your ranking and the exam. So, I'd say 35+ is definitely doable as long as you put in the work. It looks like you're gradually improving your marks right now. So, if you keep working hard, It's definitely possible to get 35+.

Note that I've heard a person get C+ for one of their SACs at my school and go on go get a 47 and I've heard a person get 50 with one of their SACs as a C, but these people aced the rest of their SACs and the exam. So, as long as you work hard, then most scores are still achievable.

[deStudent]

For everyone who is complaining about their scores, if you're getting 80%+ you are in highest band possible, ie A+. If your cohort is any good at English you are likely to get 40+ if you keep getting similar marks.

[nicnia]

Would someone be able to link or show me a high scoring text response essay for Frankenstein? Doesn't have to be a 10/10, just anything from 8/10-10/10

[TheCommando]

Is there any annotations rescources or sample top scoring essays for the section c language analysis of last years exams?

[snoz11]

creative writing doing me head in, does anyone have a sample written explanation/statement of intention for a news report?

[clarke54321]

How could I refer to the repeated phrase of 'we want' in an article. The writer continually reinstates that 'we want students to be exposed to new experiences' and that 'we want them to experience challenge.' Could I refer to it as a dictate? I don't think this really works, but can't find a better word to describe it.

Does anyone have suggestions?

[Gogo14]

How could I refer to the repeated phrase of 'we want' in an article. The writer continually reinstates that 'we want students to be exposed to new experiences' and that 'we want them to experience challenge.' Could I refer to it as a dictate? I don't think this really works, but can't find a better word to describe it.

Does anyone have suggestions?

You could replace "we" or "want" individually with synonyms. e.g. The audience want... or we desire

[patriciarose]

How could I refer to the repeated phrase of 'we want' in an article. The writer continually reinstates that 'we want students to be exposed to new experiences' and that 'we want them to experience challenge.' Could I refer to it as a dictate? I don't think this really works, but can't find a better word to describe it.

Does anyone have suggestions?

if you're asking for the technical term, i have no idea. if you want to know how to refer to it, though, that sounds to me like a kind of a constant demand, so: demand, command that, perfunctorily request, call for, enjoin (a stretch oops), adjure (the last one is a maybe though because not quite sure of the tone of your piece haha). dictate grammatically might work, but i'd agree that it doesn't exactly sound /right/. dictate their demands, maybe? idk. this is probably too late for you to use but i'll post it just in case (:

[peterpiper]

How could I refer to the repeated phrase of 'we want' in an article. The writer continually reinstates that 'we want students to be exposed to new experiences' and that 'we want them to experience challenge.' Could I refer to it as a dictate? I don't think this really works, but can't find a better word to describe it.

Does anyone have suggestions?

Don't use dictate. That doesn't really make sense. The word you're better off using is something like 'demanding' or 'protest'. Best not to linger on what it sounds like. An approximation is as good as any word that will contribute and expand your thesis.

[clarke54321]

Thanks for the input everyone! 

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[beverlycheeeee]

Hi! I am in a language analysis crisis now  like my teacher keeps saying my body paragraph is too long- its like 286 words- she did'nt even read my work and she told me to rewrite it because its too long  could any of you guys help?

Bantick claims that the homeless are mocking Melbourne by ruining the aesthetic of Melbourne. Starting off with a tired and disgusted tone, Bantick states that he is “over with the homelessness in Melbourne”, and questions about why he needs to “show special understanding to the homelessness who trash the city pavements” implying that the homeless are disrespecting Melbourne and that they do not deserve any sympathy for their behaviour. The author employs emotive language such as “over” and “trash” to antagonise the homeless and positions the audience to feel disgusted about the actions of the homeless and address the issue of the homeless disrespecting Melbourne. Further to this, Bantick also highlights the fact that homeless are littering around Melbourne, causing Melbourne to appear as unsanitary by using descriptive language such as “fast food containers, alcohol bottles, urination” to emphasise how the homeless are trashing Melbourne. This prompts the readers to be appalled by the immoral actions of the homeless and support his argument of how the homeless are mocking Melbourne. In contrary, Rizvi acknowledges how the makeshift camps of the homeless is a “collective shame”, however, she argues that the public is just ashamed about the makeshift camps ruining Melbourne’s aesthetic because the famous landmarks are not “shiny and perfect” but covered with makeshift camps. Her acknowledgement of the makeshift camps improves the reader’s opinion on the author. In addition, her use of emotive language such as “collective shame” and “shiny and perfect” encourages the readers to reflect upon their opinion about homelessness. Thus, Bantick’s article highlights that people do not need to sympathise with the homelessness who are trashing Melbourne’s aesthetic, and Rizvi argues that the wellbeing of the homeless are more important that the aesthetic of Melbourne.

+++ I don't know how to start second paragraphs ;-; help?

[littlemouse397]

Can anyone please tell me if my introduction is good? What range do you think it is? (low), (mid) or (high) and how can i improve?

The recent upbeat proposal in response to the onset growth of Melbourne’s population, has prompted measured debates concerning whether or not Melbourne’s Metro Rail Project would be affective. One measured response to this issue has been the informative post, which proposes confidently, to the rationality of his readers, that in order to maintain Melbourne liveable status and provide for its increasing population, improvements in relation to transport services via the construction of an underground railway system should be implemented. Accompanying the reproving article is a multiple of appealing visuals which concur the reality of improved metro that result in ease congestion and maintain prosperity. Contrary to his view, an experienced practitioner, Rusty Eggerton in a comment published shortly after, voices his disagreement critically, by inferring that proposed tunnels in Melbourne’s CBD will not address any of problems or pose any benefits. That they will only make matters worse.

(NOTE: there's no title, author name, date of publication, form etc..)
PS- what is the best structure? This article has 3 visuals relating to the main, and a comment. Do i have to mention the visuals each or can i do a general statement for all 3. PS- if there's more than 3 articles, do i have to mention the authors contention etc.. for all 3. (contrary to this view 3x+??) THANKS

[clarke54321]

Can anyone please tell me if my introduction is good? What range do you think it is? (low), (mid) or (high) and how can i improve?

The recent upbeat I'm just being picky. But I probably wouldn't use the word upbeat. proposal in response to the onset growth of Melbourne’s population, has prompted measured I'd leave it at debates only and omit any adjective, like measured debates concerning whether or not Melbourne’s Metro Rail Project would be effective. One measured response to this issue has been the informative post, which proposes confidently Switch around: confidently proposes , to the rationality of his readers It sounds a bit unclear. You can't exactly propose something to someone's rationality , that in order to maintain Melbourne liveable status and provide for its increasing population, improvements in relation to transport services via the construction of an underground railway system should be implemented This sentence is too long . Accompanying the reproving Try not to be subjective and place adjectives before a noun, unless they are from the piece itself. article is a multiple of appealing visuals Are multiple visuals... which concur the reality of improved metro that ----> the wording is a bit off result in ease congestion and maintain prosperity. Contrary to his view, an experienced practitioner, Rusty Eggerton in a comment published shortly after, voices his disagreement critically, by inferring Not the right word. Suggesting/Intimating that proposed tunnels in Melbourne’s CBD will not address any problems or pose any benefits. That they will only make matters worse <----- Omit this .


(NOTE: there's no title, author name, date of publication, form etc..)
PS- what is the best structure? This article has 3 visuals relating to the main, and a comment. Do i have to mention the visuals each or can i do a general statement for all 3. PS- if there's more than 3 articles, do i have to mention the authors contention etc.. for all 3. (contrary to this view 3x+??) THANKS

In this situation, I would state the main contention of the article and that of the comment (Link these with a comparative phrase. For example, does the comment echo the sentiments of the main article or is it in opposition to it?). Personally, I don't make mention of the images in my introduction, unless they are separate from the main pieces (ie. Last year's exam had a visual in the form of a cartoon, which was separated from both articles and had a contention of its own). If you have multiple letters to the editor, which are complementing the main piece, then it is okay to just make a brief reference to them in your intro. You don't have to outline all of their separate contentions. 

I'm also in year 12, so am not the best to judge the level of your work. However, I would probably give you a mid for this intro. To improve, I think you should be careful of your expression and the wordiness of your sentences. Also, ensure that you have a clear link between the contentions of the main piece and that of the comment.

If you have any questions, please feel free to ask! All the best.