English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)

[britneymoney]

Module B - TS Eliot
- Just want to know if my analysis is strong and I carry the theme of futility throughout the whole essay
- Do I need additional information in my introduction and conclusion?

What idea about humanity is Eliot communicating? Referring to at least TWO key poems, explain HOW this issue is explored and in what ways it contributes to the textual integrity of the text.

You must make close reference to the textual features used by the composer.

Spoiler

TS Eliot composed his poems throughout the Modernist period, which allowed poets and literates to view the world as was presented to them, giving readers a new perspective on life and a new way to perceive the world. Eliot’s poems ‘The Love Song of J Alfred Prufrock’ and ‘The Hollow Men’ explore a futile outlook on man’s reality.

In ‘The Love song of J. Alfred Prufrock’ Eliot explores through his persona’s constant self-deprecating questioning of his life the futility of man’s existence. This is seen immediately in the ironic title: ‘The Love song of J. Alfred Prufrock’, where a love song is suggested, but it is immediately contradicted by the overall tone, which is immensely pessimistic and full of resignation. The romantic nature of a love song suggests substantial emotions, passion and personality. However Prufrock demonstrates the dullness and emptiness that is apparent throughout modern societies. As a substitute for love, we are introduced to the futility, uncertainty and lack of self-confidence the persona battles with. Eliot uses the persona’s procrastination within the poem to heighten the futility of life. Through the dramatic monologue, Eliot examines the tortured psyche of the prototypical modern man. Eliot suggests the persona’s impotence in a world he views as bleak and desolate through the confronting simile: “Like a patient etherised upon a table”, where images of sickness and emptiness are evoked. Through the metaphor: “time to turn back and descend the stair” Eliot is proposing Prufrock is prone to procrastination, as here, Prufrock decides to desert the thoughtful progress he has made and move back to where he began. This forward backward motion of questioning his existence is reinforced by the trivial thoughts he ponders throughout the poem such as “do i dare eat a peach”, and “How his hair is growing thin” which demonstrates his obsession with unimportant matters, diverting him from the overwhelming question. Eliot uses the rhyming rhetorical question  “Do I dare disturb the universe? In a minute there is time for decisions and revisions which a minute will reverse” to express how Prufrock, due to his reluctant nature, feels as if his presence is unwanted. Through this quote the monumental questions regarding the relationship between thought and reality and the dislocation of time are being contemplated. Only to be dismissed by his futile outlook. Eliot concludes the poem by delving into his subconscious and revealing that when reality wakes us we die. The final stanza conveys a sensation of suffering, which is cemented by thehu7hyt final word “drown” - a verb describing death. The darkness portrayed within the last stanza communicates Eliot’s futile outlook on man’s existence.

In the same way, TS Eliot uses ‘The Hollow Men’ to reflect the futility, misery and emptiness of modern life. The poem is concerned with the crumbling moral fabric of society, reflecting the disenchantment with traditional values in the post world war one era. Eliot compares those in society to ‘men made of straw’ emphasising their existence and amorality, therefore further binding the futility of his modern society. The two epigraphs to the poem each reference the futility that is its main issue. The first a reference from the novel ‘Heart of Darkness’ “Mistah Kurtz – he dead” which bluntly asserts the pointlessness of life. The second, “A penny for the Old Guy” alludes to another life of wasted opportunity, that of Guy Forks. Eliot then introduces the poem with “we are the hollow men, we are the stuffed men” this juxtaposition of the idea that men cannot be “hollow” and “stuffed” at the same time displays the idea that life is a contradiction which cannot be understood. The repetition of the first person plural “we are” includes the reader in the proposition and reinforces the all-pervasive emptiness of a generation. The height of the futility of life is displayed at the end of the poem where the persona says “for thine is, life is, for thine is the”. The inclusion of this figure of speech is symbolic of the persona’s exhaustion of his futile existence, as he is unable to make the effort to finish. Immediately following this, the persona states “this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper” the repetition within the nursery like rhythm diminishes the status of humanity, challenging the traditional belief of mankind’s continuous advances in society. Eliot further reinforces through the hollow men that the futility of life will result in an end that is evoked from mans own inability to build a worthwhile society.

In conclusion, both ‘The Love Song of J Alfred Prufrock’ and ‘The Hollow Men’ explore the theme of the futility of man’s existence. The poems each respectively explore ideas encompassing the inactivity of the human existence and the relationship between the individual and the society. The examination of these ideas cements the poems textual integrity, as these issues are still debated in current society.

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[Kekemato_BAP]

Could someone mark my TS Eliot essay?
It's due on Friday and my teachers are too busy to mark it.

"Discuss the powerful ways that significant ideas are explored in your prescribed text."

Spoiler

The unique imagery within creative mediums such as poetry to represent meaning and encourage powerful responses from their audiences. In T.S Eliot's poems, “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock” and “The Hollow Men”, the imagery is quite effective in challenging and criticising the nature of the modern world, which is a common theme being conveyed throughout using powerful devices. Eliot criticises the modern world as fragmented and dreary towards the start of the 20th century. The dull urban environments that are explored in his poems represents a society of metaphorical deterioration and decay, which demonstrates his overall perspective of the modernity and isolation in the everyday lives of modern man. Ultimately, Eliot’s ideas effectively highlight the concern of modern man as a whole whilst emphasising the meaningless and monotony of the life of the modern man.
Creative forms such as poetry utilise distinct imagery to evoke meaning and purpose to motivate dynamic responses from their audiences. In his poem “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock”, Eliot portrays the landscape through dark imagery of “half-deserted streets...that follow like a tedious argument of insidious intent”, highlighting Eliot’s criticism that the everyday modern life is a monotony and menacing like the navigation of dark, “half-deserted streets”. Ultimately, this deserting imagery gives no meaning to the lives of the modern individual. Eliot adopts a different form of poem structure and punctuation than regular poetic forms because, in Love Song, he has created the first stanza as one sentence over multiple lines; expressing Eliot’s own beliefs that the everyday modern life is non-linear. The powerful urban decay imagery is employed to explore society's disease that has resulted from the rise of modernity. Eliot shows the urban squalor in the form of “restless nights in one-night cheap hotels” as he examines the decay in morals and human life that has infected us in the deterioration of the past regimes. Further imagery depicted in the personification of the “yellow smoke that rubbed its muzzle on the window panes” highlights Eliot's allusion to the industrialisation of modern society as a new century begins with the yellow smoke drawing relation between Eliot's view of the city squalor as a result of the rapid industrialisation of the modern world; highlighting his negative perception of the sickness of modernity. Eliot's use of feline imagery compares Prufrock's evasion of human connection yet wanting to be connected, which highlight Eliot's dissatisfaction with modern society's lack of courage. The cockroach imagery, "pinned and wriggling on the wall" uses urban imagery, in such a way, to convey Eliot's criticism of modern man's oblivious and cowardly nature.
Moreover, in “The Hollow Men”, Eliot further explores the empty, pointless, and meaningless nature of modern life. Eliot emphasises the deteriorating morality of society throughout his poem, which reflects his disappointment with traditional values in post-war modernity. Eliot draws comparison between modern man and “men made of straw” highlighting their existence and lack of moral standards, thus emphasising the hopelessness of Eliot’s perception of the modern world. Also, in The Hollow Men, the persona says “this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper”, which challenges the belief of man’s constant advancement in society and the world; further reinforcing the meaningless, futile nature of modern life that will only cause our own destruction because of our inability to construct a functional, meaningful society. Furthermore, the poem begins with “we are the hollow men, we are the stuffed men” as Eliot juxtaposes the ideas of people being “hollow” and “stuffed” at the same time to show the idea that modern life cannot be understood. The audience is also included in Eliot’s idea with the repetition of “we are” to reinforce the overarching “hollow” nature of the modern world and the current generation.
Ultimately, the ideas in both ‘The Love Song of J Alfred Prufrock’ and ‘The Hollow Men’ have emphasised Eliot’s perception of the futile theme of modern man and the sickness of modernity at the beginning of the 20th century. Eliot has explored ideas overarching the incompetence of the society and relationships between the individual and the modern world.

[theblackswan]

Hi, I was wondering if you could just have a quick look at my introduction for Module C - representing people and landscapes? The question was:
How does Judith Wright represent how people's experiences with the landscape shape the individual? Answer this question with detailed reference to TWO poems.

Individuals experiencing the regenerative power of landscapes which can be of either positive or negative influence to the individual has their identity shaped through changes in perceptions brought about by the land. The nature of the influences are dependent upon two things, the first being our actions, whether we have instigated an attempt to cultivate the land to suit our needs or refrained from doing so. The second is whether the energy behind the regenerative power is directed into an attack against us during a battle for assertion of dominance. The landscape is represented as an entity whose spirit is unable to be suppressed by our interference and ultimately, it is our underestimation of this sense of resilience which leads to us being the one controlled by the landscape. These ideas are convincingly presented in Judith Wright's poems 'The Flame Tree' and 'The Hawthorn Hedge'. The texts propose similar notions - that our identity and perception of the world changes according to how the nature uses its' regenerative power.

Thanks so much for offering to mark essays!

[skvh]

Hi, Does anybody have any resources for Module C: Ten Canoes? I literally cannot find anything for it.
If you do i'd greatly appreciate it if you were to let me know

[jamonwindeyer]

Module B - TS Eliot
- Just want to know if my analysis is strong and I carry the theme of futility throughout the whole essay
- Do I need additional information in my introduction and conclusion?

Hey britney! Welcome to the forums! our essay marking rules (which you can read here) require 15 posts for each essay you'd like feedback for; this is just to make sure the markers can keep up and spend a good amount of time on each

So hang around the forums a bit, ask a few questions, and you'll build up those posts in no time!

[jamonwindeyer]

Could someone mark my TS Eliot essay?
It's due on Friday and my teachers are too busy to mark it.

All over it Kekemato

Spoiler

Discuss the powerful ways that significant ideas are explored in your prescribed text.

The unique imagery within creative mediums such as poetry to represent meaning and encourage powerful responses from their audiences. A little issue with expression here, doesn't quite flow properly - But I like the idea being presented! In T.S Eliot's poems, “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock” and “The Hollow Men”, the imagery is quite effective in challenging and criticising the nature of the modern world, which is a common theme being conveyed throughout using powerful devices. Watch the use of 'quite,' it makes you seem a little unsure of your argument, try and avoid low modality language like this! Eliot criticises the modern world as fragmented and dreary towards the start of the 20th century. The dull urban environments that are explored in his poems represents a society of metaphorical deterioration and decay, which demonstrates his overall perspective of the modernity and isolation in the everyday lives of modern man. Good! I'd like a little more detail as to the sorts of critiques Elliot is presenting though, just a little vague right now. Ultimately, Eliot’s ideas effectively highlight the concern of modern man as a whole whilst emphasising the meaningless and monotony of the life of the modern man. Solid introduction - A few little expression issues, and I'd also want a little more detail about exactly the sort of things Elliot wants to communicate to the audience. However, very good start!

Creative forms such as poetry utilise distinct imagery to evoke meaning and purpose to motivate dynamic responses from their audiences. This is very much the same statement as your Thesis - I'd expect you to hone in on something more specific in a paragraph, some specific concept. In his poem “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock”, Eliot portrays the landscape through dark imagery of “half-deserted streets...that follow like a tedious argument of insidious intent”, highlighting Eliot’s criticism that the everyday modern life is a monotony and menacing like the navigation of dark, “half-deserted streets”. Fantastic. Ultimately, this deserting imagery gives no meaning to the lives of the modern individual. Eliot adopts a different form of poem structure and punctuation than regular poetic forms because, in Love Song, he has created the first stanza as one sentence over multiple lines; expressing Eliot’s own beliefs that the everyday modern life is non-linear. Nice reference to structure, lots of people ignore it. Great analysis. The powerful urban decay imagery is employed to explore society's disease that has resulted from the rise of modernity. Example? Eliot shows the urban squalor in the form of “restless nights in one-night cheap hotels” as he examines the decay in morals and human life that has infected us in the deterioration of the past regimes. A little unsure what you mean by this point, also missing a technique (or was this linked to the previous sentence?) Further imagery depicted in the personification of the “yellow smoke that rubbed its muzzle on the window panes” highlights Eliot's allusion to the industrialisation of modern society as a new century begins with the yellow smoke drawing relation between Eliot's view of the city squalor as a result of the rapid industrialisation of the modern world; highlighting his negative perception of the sickness of modernity. Fantastic analysis, but I think the expression here could be a little more direct and to the point, to avoid using the words 'yellow smoke' twice. Eliot's use of feline imagery compares Prufrock's evasion of human connection yet wanting to be connected, which highlight Eliot's dissatisfaction with modern society's lack of courage. The cockroach imagery, "pinned and wriggling on the wall" uses urban imagery, in such a way, to convey Eliot's criticism of modern man's oblivious and cowardly nature. Be sure your paragraph has a proper conclusion - But this is a fantastic paragraph, excellent analysis. I'd like your expression to be a little more direct to make it a little easier for the reader to interpret your ideas.

Moreover, in “The Hollow Men”, Eliot further explores the empty, pointless, and meaningless nature of modern life. Good. Eliot emphasises the deteriorating morality of society throughout his poem, which reflects his disappointment with traditional values in post-war modernity. Eliot draws comparison between modern man and “men made of straw” highlighting their existence and lack of moral standards, thus emphasising the hopelessness of Eliot’s perception of the modern world. Technique for that quote? Also, in The Hollow Men, the persona says “this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper”, which challenges the belief of man’s constant advancement in society and the world; further reinforcing the meaningless, futile nature of modern life that will only cause our own destruction because of our inability to construct a functional, meaningful society. Again, technique? Be careful you aren't just using things said in the poem to push arguments, the focus needs to be on techniques, how the composer uses them to present ideas to the audience. Furthermore, the poem begins with “we are the hollow men, we are the stuffed men” as Eliot juxtaposes the ideas of people being “hollow” and “stuffed” at the same time to show the idea that modern life cannot be understood. The audience is also included in Eliot’s idea with the repetition of “we are” to reinforce the overarching “hollow” nature of the modern world and the current generation. Not as analytically strong as your first paragraph, I'm missing the techniques in this one!

Ultimately, the ideas in both ‘The Love Song of J Alfred Prufrock’ and ‘The Hollow Men’ have emphasised Eliot’s perception of the futile theme of modern man and the sickness of modernity at the beginning of the 20th century. Eliot has explored ideas overarching the incompetence of the society and relationships between the individual and the modern world.

I think this is a very strong essay in terms of its analysis - Especially that first paragraph. Focus on techniques, no retell, did an excellent job there!! Not quite as strong in the 2nd paragraph though - You need more techniques to sustain the argument.

Probably my biggest overall comment would be conceptual clarity. Often it feels like the argument is a little vague, just "modern world is bad." I think it's mostly a structural thing, making sure it is really clear what you'll be arguing from the start and honing in on specific concepts in your paragraph. Don't get me wrong, what you've got works well, but it could be better you might also want to consider adding a third paragraph for a little more depth?

A few little expression issues too, but overall, nice work!! I think the ideas are great and the analysis is, on the whole, very effective

[jamonwindeyer]

Hi, I was wondering if you could just have a quick look at my introduction for Module C - representing people and landscapes? The question was:
How does Judith Wright represent how people's experiences with the landscape shape the individual? Answer this question with detailed reference to TWO poems.

Thanks so much for offering to mark essays!

Happy to help!

Individuals experiencing the regenerative power of landscapes which can be of either positive or negative influence to the individual has their identity shaped through changes in perceptions brought about by the land. Like the concept, but I think the expression is a little much all at once. Try breaking the idea up with commas or perhaps even into multiple sentences. The nature of the influences are dependent upon two things, the first being our actions, whether we have instigated an attempt to cultivate the land to suit our needs or refrained from doing so. The second is whether the energy behind the regenerative power is directed into an attack against us during a battle for assertion of dominance. Not 100% clear on what you mean by this second point? Perhaps could be expressed a little more clearly. The landscape is represented as an entity whose spirit is unable to be suppressed by our interference and ultimately, it is our underestimation of this sense of resilience which leads to us being the one controlled by the landscape. A little too long on explaining concept - Ideally, you'd want to be through the conceptual elements after 2 or 3 sentences! These ideas are convincingly presented in Judith Wright's poems 'The Flame Tree' and 'The Hawthorn Hedge'. I'd add something here about techniques - It is a representation module, you need to explore HOW the ideas are represented with techniques and structural elements! The texts propose similar notions - that our identity and perception of the world changes according to how the nature uses its' regenerative power.

I think this is a strong intro - I think you should try and get through the conceptual stuff faster and put more emphasis on techniques and exactly how/what Wright is trying to portray!

[Wales]

It's that time of the term again. I received my Brave new world assessment and put together a quick introduction. Would one of you kind fellas mind taking a look and let me know what you think?

Politics illustrates the ultimate powerlessness of ordinary people.

To what extent is this view represented in your prescribed text and ONE other related text of your own choosing?

Dystopian texts are an hyperbolic representation of the state of political affairs in contemporary society. Composers of such texts utilise the conflicting ethics of a dystopic society to extrapolate the disturbing ideas of manipulation to depict the underlying powerlessness of the people. By ascribing these ideologies to an applicable medium the composer is able to create an atmosphere that allows the audience to understand the truth behind political actions.. Huxley’s Brave New World deeply investigates the dystopian themes of inculcation, dehumanisation and totalitarianism while Oliver Stone’s biographical political thriller Snowden depicts the modern political obsession of being omnipotent and manipulative. Both texts explore the advances in technology and exercises the similar themes of power and manipulation to create a totalitarianistic and dystopic society where individuals are stripped of their intrinsic autonomy.

Greatly appreciated, Wales

[Kekemato_BAP]

All over it Kekemato

Spoiler

Discuss the powerful ways that significant ideas are explored in your prescribed text.

The unique imagery within creative mediums such as poetry to represent meaning and encourage powerful responses from their audiences. A little issue with expression here, doesn't quite flow properly - But I like the idea being presented! In T.S Eliot's poems, “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock” and “The Hollow Men”, the imagery is quite effective in challenging and criticising the nature of the modern world, which is a common theme being conveyed throughout using powerful devices. Watch the use of 'quite,' it makes you seem a little unsure of your argument, try and avoid low modality language like this! Eliot criticises the modern world as fragmented and dreary towards the start of the 20th century. The dull urban environments that are explored in his poems represents a society of metaphorical deterioration and decay, which demonstrates his overall perspective of the modernity and isolation in the everyday lives of modern man. Good! I'd like a little more detail as to the sorts of critiques Elliot is presenting though, just a little vague right now. Ultimately, Eliot’s ideas effectively highlight the concern of modern man as a whole whilst emphasising the meaningless and monotony of the life of the modern man. Solid introduction - A few little expression issues, and I'd also want a little more detail about exactly the sort of things Elliot wants to communicate to the audience. However, very good start!

Creative forms such as poetry utilise distinct imagery to evoke meaning and purpose to motivate dynamic responses from their audiences. This is very much the same statement as your Thesis - I'd expect you to hone in on something more specific in a paragraph, some specific concept. In his poem “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock”, Eliot portrays the landscape through dark imagery of “half-deserted streets...that follow like a tedious argument of insidious intent”, highlighting Eliot’s criticism that the everyday modern life is a monotony and menacing like the navigation of dark, “half-deserted streets”. Fantastic. Ultimately, this deserting imagery gives no meaning to the lives of the modern individual. Eliot adopts a different form of poem structure and punctuation than regular poetic forms because, in Love Song, he has created the first stanza as one sentence over multiple lines; expressing Eliot’s own beliefs that the everyday modern life is non-linear. Nice reference to structure, lots of people ignore it. Great analysis. The powerful urban decay imagery is employed to explore society's disease that has resulted from the rise of modernity. Example? Eliot shows the urban squalor in the form of “restless nights in one-night cheap hotels” as he examines the decay in morals and human life that has infected us in the deterioration of the past regimes. A little unsure what you mean by this point, also missing a technique (or was this linked to the previous sentence?) Further imagery depicted in the personification of the “yellow smoke that rubbed its muzzle on the window panes” highlights Eliot's allusion to the industrialisation of modern society as a new century begins with the yellow smoke drawing relation between Eliot's view of the city squalor as a result of the rapid industrialisation of the modern world; highlighting his negative perception of the sickness of modernity. Fantastic analysis, but I think the expression here could be a little more direct and to the point, to avoid using the words 'yellow smoke' twice. Eliot's use of feline imagery compares Prufrock's evasion of human connection yet wanting to be connected, which highlight Eliot's dissatisfaction with modern society's lack of courage. The cockroach imagery, "pinned and wriggling on the wall" uses urban imagery, in such a way, to convey Eliot's criticism of modern man's oblivious and cowardly nature. Be sure your paragraph has a proper conclusion - But this is a fantastic paragraph, excellent analysis. I'd like your expression to be a little more direct to make it a little easier for the reader to interpret your ideas.

Moreover, in “The Hollow Men”, Eliot further explores the empty, pointless, and meaningless nature of modern life. Good. Eliot emphasises the deteriorating morality of society throughout his poem, which reflects his disappointment with traditional values in post-war modernity. Eliot draws comparison between modern man and “men made of straw” highlighting their existence and lack of moral standards, thus emphasising the hopelessness of Eliot’s perception of the modern world. Technique for that quote? Also, in The Hollow Men, the persona says “this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, this is the way the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper”, which challenges the belief of man’s constant advancement in society and the world; further reinforcing the meaningless, futile nature of modern life that will only cause our own destruction because of our inability to construct a functional, meaningful society. Again, technique? Be careful you aren't just using things said in the poem to push arguments, the focus needs to be on techniques, how the composer uses them to present ideas to the audience. Furthermore, the poem begins with “we are the hollow men, we are the stuffed men” as Eliot juxtaposes the ideas of people being “hollow” and “stuffed” at the same time to show the idea that modern life cannot be understood. The audience is also included in Eliot’s idea with the repetition of “we are” to reinforce the overarching “hollow” nature of the modern world and the current generation. Not as analytically strong as your first paragraph, I'm missing the techniques in this one!

Ultimately, the ideas in both ‘The Love Song of J Alfred Prufrock’ and ‘The Hollow Men’ have emphasised Eliot’s perception of the futile theme of modern man and the sickness of modernity at the beginning of the 20th century. Eliot has explored ideas overarching the incompetence of the society and relationships between the individual and the modern world.

I think this is a very strong essay in terms of its analysis - Especially that first paragraph. Focus on techniques, no retell, did an excellent job there!! Not quite as strong in the 2nd paragraph though - You need more techniques to sustain the argument.

Probably my biggest overall comment would be conceptual clarity. Often it feels like the argument is a little vague, just "modern world is bad." I think it's mostly a structural thing, making sure it is really clear what you'll be arguing from the start and honing in on specific concepts in your paragraph. Don't get me wrong, what you've got works well, but it could be better you might also want to consider adding a third paragraph for a little more depth?

A few little expression issues too, but overall, nice work!! I think the ideas are great and the analysis is, on the whole, very effective

Thank you for the feedback!!
How could I turn an essay into a speech? This essay was supposed to be a speech but I am struggling on what a speech is... :/

And I don't get the meaning of textual integrity...apparently it means like how it relates to us today but I don't know how I can incorporate that into my speech

[theblackswan]

Hey, thanks so much for taking time and marking my intro! I really appreciate it  . I've got a question: For Module A, my teacher always states that its' a good idea to put a sentence about context at the start of each body paragraph. Is there a general structure for this? For example, The aftermath of the World War 2 had led to blah blah.... and then do you start your topic sentence or is it the other way around? Or can both content and context be chucked into one strong opening statement? Thanks again!

[jamonwindeyer]

Thank you for the feedback!!
How could I turn an essay into a speech? This essay was supposed to be a speech but I am struggling on what a speech is... :/
And I don't get the meaning of textual integrity...apparently it means like how it relates to us today but I don't know how I can incorporate that into my speech

Turning an essay into a speech isn't too bad, the structure will be much the same, you just need to simplify the language a bit!! Try reading the essay sentence aloud, then hiding it and writing the same sentence as you would say it to a mate. Chances are that will nail the colloquial aspect

Textual integrity is defined in the syllabus as:

The unity of a text; its coherent use of form and language to produce an integrated whole in terms of meaning and value.

So, it is how well it it constructed to achieve its purpose and communicate to the audience (which yes, includes us). You might want to have a read of this Module B essay guide

[jamonwindeyer]

Hey, thanks so much for taking time and marking my intro! I really appreciate it  . I've got a question: For Module A, my teacher always states that its' a good idea to put a sentence about context at the start of each body paragraph. Is there a general structure for this? For example, The aftermath of the World War 2 had led to blah blah.... and then do you start your topic sentence or is it the other way around? Or can both content and context be chucked into one strong opening statement? Thanks again!

You are welcome! There's not really a set structure in my opinion, I like that you are being told to make context a focus though! You could do a sentence on context, then one on concept, or the other way around, or integrate the two (I personally think opening sentences should have the concept in them) - Much your preference and down to your personal style!

[Kekemato_BAP]

Turning an essay into a speech isn't too bad, the structure will be much the same, you just need to simplify the language a bit!! Try reading the essay sentence aloud, then hiding it and writing the same sentence as you would say it to a mate. Chances are that will nail the colloquial aspect

Textual integrity is defined in the syllabus as:

The unity of a text; its coherent use of form and language to produce an integrated whole in terms of meaning and value.

So, it is how well it it constructed to achieve its purpose and communicate to the audience (which yes, includes us). You might want to have a read of this Module B essay guide

Ahh!! I get it now!! Thank you

Also, for speeches, you can use colloquial language. But how colloquial can you get?
Is it ok to swap "Eliot criticises..." for "Eliot says that..."? What would be a good colloquial alternative that isn't too teen language.

[jamonwindeyer]

Ahh!! I get it now!! Thank you

Also, for speeches, you can use colloquial language. But how colloquial can you get?
Is it ok to swap "Eliot criticises..." for "Eliot says that..."? What would be a good colloquial alternative that isn't too teen language.

It's a fairly fine balance, you want to be using sophisticated words still, but just in a way that feels natural to you!! The swap you suggested is definitely okay, but 'criticises' is a better word and if it suits how you would say it then that could be better. It very much comes down to how you feel comfortable speaking

[Blazeee]

Hello!
Attached is my English folio response...exploring inner journeys in relation to the play Macbeth...
It's due Tuesday....any feedback would be greatly appreciated! thanks heaps!!
Details are included in the attached document.