English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)

[fizaac]

Metropolis and 1984 (MOD A) " How is the intertextual perspectives of power explored in the texts?"
HEY! Please save my essay (( my english teacher gives no feedback and im struggling to hit that A Range!
Thankyou soo much )

[elysepopplewell]

Metropolis and 1984 (MOD A) " How is the intertextual perspectives of power explored in the texts?"
HEY! Please save my essay (( my english teacher gives no feedback and im struggling to hit that A Range!
Thankyou soo much )

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[mohanedibrahim1]

Wilfred Owen utilises strong mental imagery and symbolism of evidently reconstructing the shocking reality of war to the audience, capturing their consciousness and drawing them into the world of poetry. Throughout Owen’s work, he hopes to uncover the truth about war and how it was hypocritical and proposed by deceitful governments. Owen’s powerful poems illustrate the distressing effect of war upon the young soldiers, deceiving them with highly false messages and then punishing the innocent horribly and severely by uncovering them out of their innocence. The war poem Dulce Et Decorum Est Owen strongly illuminates the honour and greatness related with war and replaces them with horrible and sickening reality of war. However, the poem Anthem for Doomed Youth Owen clearly creates and compares a traditional funeral as a way to demonstrate how the young men have been forsaken and unplugged of their lives and dignity upon the battlefield. Owen’s work continues to affect the contemporary audience in which still afflicted with the range of emotions, outlining Owen’s poetry work. Owen has outlined textual integrity throughout his use of work through both false and true imagery of war to the audience, the pointless and sympathy of it.


Within the poem, Dulce Et Decorum Est illuminates great and strong images to attract the audience within the world of poetry. The poem Dulce Et Decorum Est by Owen conveys a reconstructed way that the viscous government was seen as an ‘unfriendly’ inmate with ‘all Blind’ to ‘Drunk with fatigue’ groups. The metaphor ‘’Blind and drunk’’ highlights the government's use of power and high authority towards its people. The betrayal upon the soldier's guides as damaging the young ‘men's’ innocence bodies left scarred, drawing to the audience the terrible lost upon the soldiers. Owen’s body of work illustrates to the reader the highly fails of the government and its disgusting deceiving character. Owen’s use of the word ‘ men’ within the line ‘Men marched asleep many lost their boots’ sustains the innocence in groups, demonstrating that these young soldiers are not yet ready for the battlefield and the government is an evil predator for nature. The governments have been peeled and shamed towards the contemporary audience of their betrayal of these young innocent ‘men’ exposing them to reality such as ‘ drowning, choking. These young men have been left for dead in the line ‘ And flound’ring like a man in fire or lime’’, expresses in dying in an unnatural death for their fulfillments. These work of Owen enables the audience to draw themselves into the world of poetry.   













The Poem, Anthem for Doomed Youth Owen commands the contemporary audience to feel the conditions of the young soldiers in the battlefield within the poem Anthem for Doomed Youth.  The poem Anthem for Doomed Youth Owen highlights the waste in the battlefield and how the young who have served their lives and passed away have not been recognized, illustrating ‘’ Who die as cattle’’ rather than a traditional passing. The use symbolism ‘’cattle’’ in the line ‘’ what passing-bells for these who die as cattle’’ spotlights how the young soldiers have been left shattered in tears with sorrow in comparison in having a ceremonial funeral. The devilious government slack in giving the innocent young a suitable traditional church burial highlights how the ‘’boys’’ have been let-down even after death. In the line ‘’ The shrill demented choirs of wailing shells’’, the use of Metaphor, and personification draws the audience the horrific, and horror sounds of the guns in the battlefield as Owen conveys a nightmare war. This image illuminates with in distinction with the authorities false image, enabling the composer to sight the horrible lies about the government in telling ‘’ No mockeries now for them’’ exposes the political false deceptive lies. Within the line ‘’ Only the monstrous anger of the guns’’ publishes the terrible image of the soldiers only receiving gunfires, and the horror of war. These images of war conveys and encounters the audience that the fact of war is a total waste of time, and pointless. Owen’s ideology of work highlights the young soldiers thought of war, but however were betrayed and left abandoned.

Dulce Et Decorum Est the poem, Wilfred Owen enables the audience to sight the deceiving empathy of war into the world of poetry. The poem Dulce Et Decorum Est Owen communicates the falsehood and lies about the battlefield taught by the government. In the line ‘’ Men marched asleep’’, instead of a normal day. A use of metaphor and the alliterated word ‘’M’’ in the line ‘’Men marched asleep many lost their boots’’ emphasises that many young soldiers have been put- down in a humiliating manner. This indicates that the authorities have conveyed lying deception messages of war towards the soldiers. The use of ‘’ onomatopoeia’’ and ‘simile’ within the line ‘’ Knock-Kneed coughing like hags we cursed through sludge’’, illustrates towards the responder the horrific lies towards the soldiers propagandized by the government, as Wilfred utilizes as a lying land. This highly depicts with the authorities deceptive portrayal image, allowing the contemporary audience to get a sight of the authorities lies told to ‘’children ardent for some desperate glory’’ shaming the government's horrible deceiving falsehood. The line ‘’ Gas! Gas! Quick boys!’ illuminates their incapacity and inexperienced young soldiers. This tells the fabrication highly communicated by the powerful authority. Owen’s use of work retells the composer the hypocritical lies from the government. The work of Owen highlights that war is a waste of time and useless. Overall, this enables this draws the audience in the world of poetry.

Hello i like to get my Module B a close study text by Wilfred Owen marked its not finished yet, but like to see how well it has gone so far thanks!!!

[jamonwindeyer]

Hello i like to get my Module B a close study text by Wilfred Owen marked its not finished yet, but like to see how well it has gone so far thanks!!!

Hey! I've let you know this a few times - We require 15 posts on ATAR Notes for every essay you'd like marked! This is to make sure the markers can keep up with demand you are 8 posts right now, so you need 7 more! Full essay marking rules are available at the link in my signature

[maria1999]

hiya guys!
I have an assessment task on T.S Eliot and was wondering if someone could take a look on what I've written. Thank you so much in advance!!
This is the question:

How does the poetry of T.S. Eliot use distinctive images to critique ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century?

We also need to reference this passage:

The yellow smoke that rubs its muzzle on the window-panes,
     Licked its tongue into the corners of the evening,
     Lingered upon the pools that stand in drains,
     Let fall upon its back the soot that falls from chimneys,
     Slipped by the terrace, made a sudden leap,
     And seeing that it was a soft October night,
     Curled once about the house, and fell asleep

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Distinctive imagery is used within creative mediums such as poetry to elicit meaning from their subject matter and encourage dynamic responses from their audiences. These images are particularly effective in critiquing the nature of modern society as prevalent in T.S Eliot's oeuvre, “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”. Eliot critiques  modern life at the beginning of the 20th century as fragmented and weary. The desolate urban landscape that contextualises his poems within a world of figurative decay is demonstrative of his overall examination of the role of modernity and isolation within the lives of a modern day individual.

The influence of modernity is particularly prevalent within the imagery of modernist literature; The ramification of this cultural shift from romantic optimism to pessimistic cynicism saturates the imagery within poetry such as that of T.S Eliot, particularly within his poem “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock”. TThe landscape within the text is presented through a series of images of  “half-deserted streets...that follow like a tedious argument of insidious intent”, illustrating Eliot’s critique that the journey of modern life is monotonous and with menacing intentions that lead individuals to believe that their existence has substance and meaning. The manipulation of traditional punctuation transforms the entire first stanza into one, twelve lined sentence. This subversion of conventional poetic features manifests Eliot’s examination of reality as non-linear and non-sensical.  Images of urban decay are used to effectively explore the contemporary societal sickness that has come as a result of newly emerging modernist ideals. This image of urban squalor is elicited in the vision of “restless nights in one-night cheap hotels” in the way that Eliot’s examines the moral decay that has infected society in the erosion of the ancien regime. Feline imagery is depicted in the personification of the “yellow smoke that rubbed its muzzle on the window panes”. The image of smoke is particularly prevalent within Eliot’s poetry as it alludes to the rapidly industrialising society at the beginning of the 20th century. The distinctive description of yellow smoke can be seen to have negative connotations as it is reminiscent of the yellowish tinge of jaundice which is further demonstration of how Eliot inherently links the notion of modernity with sickness.

“Rhapsody on a Windy Night” see’s Eliot explore the same societal deprivation that has come as a result of “modernity”. The nonlinear structure of the poem is Eliot’s simultaneous comment that humanity is unable to connect the fragmented and broken pieces of its consciousness. The image of attenuated light through the “lunar synthesis” furthers this idea as Eliot alludes to humans only seeing a pale reflection of the truth. The motif of light is carried through in the personification of the street lamps that “sputtered” and “muttered”. This in turn is reflective of the idea that mere inanimate objects are capable of more agency than human beings who are thus constrained by their context of the early 20th century. Eliot writes within a zeitgeist where society was in a transitory state with the “old ways” slowly becoming negligible. In wake of this, Eliot uses the metaphorical imagery of an “old carb with barnacles on his back” to illustrate the ancien regime that attempts to “grip” onto the fringes of rapidly modernising society. Within “Rhapsody” Eliot conveys the premise that because of this transition, there can only ever be glimpses of humanities former greatness. The olfactory imagery used in describing the “smells of dust and eau de Cologne” elicits this notion and the understanding of one’s own mortality. Eliot’s examination of the repercussions which the influence of modernity can bring to modern life is demonstrative of its role within the life of a modern day individual.

The isolating nature of modern life at a time where society was rapidly shifting in all facets is heavily explored in the oeuvre of T.S Eliot. The poem, “The Lovesong of J.Alfred Prufrock” is presented as a melancholy stream of consciousness as the persona makes his way throughout the streets of London isolated by his own self-inflicted alienation. The aquatic imagery used in the poem, particularly that of the crab,  see’s Eliot liken Prufrock’s consciousness to that of a “pair of ragged claws/scuttling across the floors of silent seas”. The strong characterisation of Prufrock as a crustacean that is continually lingering between predicaments, unable to make decisions is particularly effective in describing the state of modern man at beginning of the twentieth century. Eliot examines the nature of  society at the time through his critique of industrialization and it’s place in modern life. The image of the “smoke that rises from the pipes of lonely men in shirt sleeves, leaning out of windows” alludes to Eliot attributing humanity’s state of fragmentation and their yearning to return to a previous state of being to the rapidly industrialising society of the 20th century. Eliot employs the use of symbolism when he presents the image of a cat that “licked its tongue into the corners of the evening”. This is seen to be an allegory for human existence that is characterised by the animals feline traits; selfish with only the means to be concerned of its subjective well being. The artificiality of the human psyche plagues modern reality in the world where Prufrock must “prepare a face to meet the faces”. Eliot examines this requirement to conform to society's standards in expense of our moral identities in his critique of modern life and it’s isolating consequences at the beginning of the twentieth century.

Eliot similarly critiques the repercussions of isolation within modern life at the beginning of the twentieth century within “Rhapsody”.  Similar to Prufrock, the author attributes the fragmented nature of human consciousness to the newly emerging modernist ideals which have replaced seemingly antiquated perspectives on the world. The metaphorical image of a “broken spring in a factory yard” see’s Eliot allude to our own consciousness being broken by the concept of industrialisation and modernity. Typical of his modernist roots, the oeuvre of T.S Eliot occupies the idea that human individuals are isolated from one another because their understanding of the world is entirely subjective. This separation has thus caused modern life to become futile in regards to the possibility of human connection. The persona within “Rhapsody” experiences this denial in the solipsistic image of a child that “pocketed a toy..along the quay”, and thus is unable to relate and resonate with his human counterparts as he “could see nothing behind that child’s eye”. The synecdoche employed is representative of this disconnected alienation as Eliot’s critique, that is focalised from his modernist perspective, is proved to be true through the persona’s experience. As alienation is presented to have such wrought consequences in the protagonists stream of consciousness, Eliot draws thematic connections between the role of modernity in the plight of individuals during the zeitgeist which he writes. 

[jamonwindeyer]

Hi,
I have an in-class task on wednesday that is on this set question regarding the poetry of T.S.Eliot, How does the poetry of T.S.Eliot use distinctive images to critique ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century?

I was wondering if i might be able to get some feedback on what I've written as I feel really uncertain with this module and I've really struggled to write the essay, thankyou!

Hey, sure thing Tahlia! I've attached your essay with feedback in bold:

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How does the poetry of T.S.Eliot use distinctive images to critique ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century?

T.S. Eliot uses distinctive images to critique the insecure and fractured nature of ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century. Great start to introduce the text - Perhaps play with a more general opening to introduce the idea. "The effectiveness of a composer is often determined by their ability to craft images for the responder that convey their purpose," or something. THEN launch into your text. Eliot’s modernist form dictates his critique of ‘modern life’ in his poetry, moving away from the Romanticism of the 18th and 19th century and instead engaging with the uncertain and futile nature of contemporary life, amidst the tensions of pre-war Europe. Fantastic contextual links. Both ‘The Love Song of J.Alfred Prufrock’ (1915) and ‘Preludes’ (1920) communicate Eliot’s critique of the fundamentally fractured nature of life for the modern day individual. On the whole, excellent introduction. Adding a brief breakdown of the themes/ideas you'll cover in the essay would benefit you.

Eliot’s critique of the uncertainty of ‘modern life’ is explored throughout the distinctive imagery of ‘The Love Song of J.Alfred Prufrock’. The insecure and hesitant nature of the poem’s protagonist, Prufrock, is reflective of, and critiques, the uncertainty and paralysis of urban, modern life. The desolate, urban landscape depicted in Prufrock’s stream of consciousness articulates Eliot’s discontent and critique of middle class society at the beginning of the Twentieth Century. These are fantastic ideas, but I'm missing techniques - HOW are these images created? What choices does Elliot make to make them obvious? You are better off launching straight into the analysis that follows this sentence -> The personification of the “yellow smoke” that “Licked its tongue into the corners of the evening” and “Lingered upon the pools that stand in drains” embodies the uncertainty of Prufrock and that of ‘modern-man’. Great. The feline imagery of a cat lingering pathetically on the outside of a house asserts to Prufrock avoiding, yet desiring, physical contact, communicating Eliot’s discontent with the timidity of modern society. The urban image of a cockroach “pinned and wriggling on the wall” embodies Eliot’s critique of the uncertain and timid nature of modern life. Fantastic analysis here, love your style. Prufrock is exposed as a specimen, lacking free will at the expense of his fear and uncertainty that hinder his ability to act. The rhetorical question of “Should I, after tea and cakes and ices, Have the strength to force the moment to its crisis” further illustrates the indecisiveness of modern living. The imagery of a middle-class setting communicates Eliot’s criticism of the timidity of the modern day individual, constantly shying away from decisions and hiding behind the comforts of everyday life. Evidently, T.S.Eliot critiques the uncertainty associated with ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century through the distinctive imagery of Prufrock’s stream of consciousness. Love this paragraph - Excellent work here Tahlia. I'd love to see you recognise the audience in a more obvious way, what effect exactly do these distinctive images have on us?

Similarly, ‘Preludes’ echoes the uncertainty and timidity of ‘Prufrock’ through Eliot’s depiction of everyday living in a desolate, urban landscape. Nice logical flow of argument here. The poem presents decaying images of a city and its inhabitants through fragments of daily existence, revealing the uncertainty and inaction of humanity due to the fractured nature of ‘modern life’. Eliot’s critique of modern consciousness as fragmented and illogical is evident in “The thousand sordid images...flickered against the ceiling”. These ‘images’ reflect the uncertainty of the modern day individual, such as Prufrock, attempting to make sense of our fractured understanding of human existence. Excellent - Nice link to the first paragraph as well. The speaker’s “vision of the street As the street hardly understands” reveals the reality of life’s uncertainty. The agency of the landscape reveals Eliot’s critique of modern life’s uncertainty, arguing that our fragmented consciousness dictates how we perceive and often misinterpret our modern world. Eliot’s critique of the uncertainty of modern consciousness is further conveyed through that of “...a blackened street Impatient to assume the world”. Be sure to have a technique with EVERY textual reference - A quote without a technique is immediately not as analytically strong as the rest of your points. It sticks out when the rest is so good! Eliot critiques the uncertainty of modern life, again, through the agency of the ‘blackened street’, alluding to humanity’s inability to understand the reality of modern existence. Thus, the distinctive imagery of a desolate, urban landscapes in ‘Preludes’ reveals the uncertainty and fractured nature of ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century. Another fantastic paragraph.

Eliot’s poetry also critiques the alienating and futile experience of ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century. The isolated images of urban life in ‘The Love Song of J.Alfred Prufrock’ embody “the idea of a life not fully lived”, which is “central to (Eliot’s) poetry” (Craig Raine). Nice inclusion of a critique - I never used these myself, but I think having the qualification/brief details of the person providing it would be beneficial. Even just, 'literary critic' or something. The alienating nature of modern life is personified through the “yellow smoke that rubs its muzzle on the window-panes”, which implies the looking out of Prufrock who is trapped by his own uncertainty. Slight expression issue there, the 'looking out of Prufrock.' His reality and clarity is obscured by the ‘smoke’ of his paralyzed and timid nature, leading to his alienation within society. Eliot reveals the futility of modern life, due to such alienation, through Prufrock’s statement of “measuring out (his) life with coffee spoons”. The hyperbole articulates how Prufrock has spent his life procrastinating due to his overwhelming anxiety and uncertainty, reflecting Eliot’s critique of the insecurities and inaction of people in modern daily existence. Nice! Try and get the quote and technique in the same sentence - It will flow better! The futility of ‘modern life’ is further critiqued in the metaphoric imagery of a crab, “Scuttling across the floors of silent seas”. The repetitive action of a crap ‘scuttling’ along the ocean floor is symbolic of the monotony and futility of Prufrock’s life, due to his constant state of procrastination and inner turmoil as to whether he should act. Be sure to have a proper conclusion for your paragraphs, as you did above! This paragraph also doesn't refer to 'distinctive images,' it could answer the question more effectively!

The alienating and futile nature of ‘modern life’ is also evident in ‘Preludes’, in which Eliot critiques the monotony of urban existence and subsequent futility of modern life. The opening image of the poem, “The winter evening settles down”, illustrates a cold and barren setting in which nothing flourishes. The personification of the ‘winter evening’ articulates the omnipresent, alienation of modern life that engulfs all aspects of everyday living, similar to that of a chilling, winter’s evening. Good. Eliot highlights the futility of modern life through the description of modern man “...trampled by insistent feet At four and five and six o’clock”. The consistent iambic rhythm replicates the monotony of life’s daily routine, implying a “...growing sense of alienation and isolation in a world wherein daily existence is synonymous with ‘living death’” (Steve Ellis). Again, great use of critique - But would still be better to have the technique and quote in the same sentence, if possible - I understand it isn't always! Eliot further critiques the futile and alienating state of modern life through the notion of humanity as “...some infinitely gentle, infinitely suffering thing”. The repetition of the adverb assures the reader of the relentless suffering and alienation associated with modern life, with humanity fixed in a continuous state of futile existence. The distinctive images used by Eliot encapsulate the alienation and futility of urban existence, successfully critiquing the fractured nature of ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century.

Wow, this response is stellar Tahlia - You should be really proud! Amazing analysis, answers the question excellently, fantastic ideas and great style. Not much I can critique!! Take a peek at the comments throughout (there aren't many, it is really a top notch response) - I think the analysis did weaken slightly towards the end, and you also stray away from the question just a little bit. I'd also like to see you recognise the impact on the audience more directly - These distinctive images are created for an audience, exactly what is the effect on the responder? What do we learn about Elliot's opinion of Modern Life? How is our view impacted? These sorts of things would elevate your essay further.

But excellent job, definitely a Band 6 response in my opinion!

[jamonwindeyer]

hiya guys!
I have an assessment task on T.S Eliot and was wondering if someone could take a look on what I've written. Thank you so much in advance!!

Hey Maria! Was going to do this tomorrow, but have a sneaky suspicion that you and Tahlia have the same task due on Wednesday (or maybe two schools set the same question, definitely possible, aha!). In any case, your essay is also attached with feedback in bold:

Spoiler

How does the poetry of T.S. Eliot use distinctive images to critique ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century?

Distinctive imagery is used within creative mediums such as poetry to elicit meaning from their subject matter and encourage dynamic responses from their audiences. Fabulous intro! You might also want to mention that these images are 'crafted' through techniques. These images are particularly effective in critiquing the nature of modern society as prevalent in T.S Eliot's oeuvre, “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”. Eliot critiques modern life at the beginning of the 20th century as fragmented and weary. The desolate urban landscape that contextualises his poems within a world of figurative decay is demonstrative of his overall examination of the role of modernity and isolation within the lives of a modern day individual. I think this introduction works well - A brief breakdown of the themes/ideas you'll be exploring in the essay would be beneficial.

The influence of modernity is particularly prevalent within the imagery of modernist literature; The ramification of this cultural shift from romantic optimism to pessimistic cynicism saturates the imagery within poetry such as that of T.S Eliot, particularly within his poem “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock”. Love the idea of this intro, but expression seems just a tad off in the middle there. The landscape within the text is presented through a series of images of “half-deserted streets...that follow like a tedious argument of insidious intent”, illustrating Eliot’s critique that the journey of modern life is monotonous and with menacing intentions that lead individuals to believe that their existence has substance and meaning.  Great explanation, but what technique does this quote use? The concept is baseless without the technique. The manipulation of traditional punctuation transforms the entire first stanza into one, twelve lined sentence. This subversion of conventional poetic features manifests Eliot’s examination of reality as non-linear and non-sensical.  Great to see you discussing form, not just literary devices. Images of urban decay are used to effectively explore the contemporary societal sickness that has come as a result of newly emerging modernist ideals. This image of urban squalor is elicited in the vision of “restless nights in one-night cheap hotels” in the way that Eliot’s examines the moral decay that has infected society in the erosion of the ancient regime. Feline imagery is depicted in the personification of the “yellow smoke that rubbed its muzzle on the window panes”. The image of smoke is particularly prevalent within Eliot’s poetry as it alludes to the rapidly industrialising society at the beginning of the 20th century. Fabulous contextual link. The distinctive description of yellow smoke can be seen to have negative connotations as it is reminiscent of the yellowish tinge of jaundice which is further demonstration of how Eliot inherently links the notion of modernity with sickness. Try and have a more distinctive conclusion, a more obvious finish. Also make sure every quote has a technique - But a fantastic paragraph!

“Rhapsody on a Windy Night” see’s Eliot explore the same societal deprivation that has come as a result of “modernity”. The nonlinear structure of the poem is Eliot’s simultaneous comment that humanity is unable to connect the fragmented and broken pieces of its consciousness. The image of attenuated light through the “lunar synthesis” furthers this idea as Eliot alludes to humans only seeing a pale reflection of the truth. Technique?
 Try not to just use 'image,' HOW is the image created? The motif of light is carried through in the personification of the street lamps that “sputtered” and “muttered”. This in turn is reflective of the idea that mere inanimate objects are capable of more agency than human beings who are thus constrained by their context of the early 20th century. Fabulous. Eliot writes within a zeitgeist where society was in a transitory state with the “old ways” slowly becoming negligible. In wake of this, Eliot uses the metaphorical imagery of an “old carb with barnacles on his back” to illustrate the ancien regime that attempts to “grip” onto the fringes of rapidly modernising society. Within “Rhapsody” Eliot conveys the premise that because of this transition, there can only ever be glimpses of humanities former greatness. The olfactory imagery used in describing the “smells of dust and eau de Cologne” elicits this notion and the understanding of one’s own mortality. Eliot’s examination of the repercussions which the influence of modernity can bring to modern life is demonstrative of its role within the life of a modern day individual. Not much to say about this paragraph - Really stellar stuff! You've crafted your analysis excellently!

The isolating nature of modern life at a time where society was rapidly shifting in all facets is heavily explored in the oeuvre of T.S Eliot. The poem, “The Lovesong of J.Alfred Prufrock” is presented as a melancholy stream of consciousness as the persona makes his way throughout the streets of London isolated by his own self-inflicted alienation. A tad bit towards retell, but I see the reasoning behind it. Might be a little unnecessary. The aquatic imagery used in the poem, particularly that of the crab, see’s Eliot liken Prufrock’s consciousness to that of a “pair of ragged claws/scuttling across the floors of silent seas”. The strong characterisation of Prufrock as a crustacean that is continually lingering between predicaments, unable to make decisions is particularly effective in describing the state of modern man at beginning of the twentieth century. Excellent link - I like the structure of technique/quote, then explanation/context. It works well. If you can manage to craft a sentence with all of it in one go, that is the next step. Eliot examines the nature of  society at the time through his critique of industrialization and it’s place in modern life. The image of the “smoke that rises from the pipes of lonely men in shirt sleeves, leaning out of windows” alludes to Eliot attributing humanity’s state of fragmentation and their yearning to return to a previous state of being to the rapidly industrialising society of the 20th century. Great explanation - Again, try not to rely too much on 'imagery' as a technique when discussing distinctive images. HOW are the images created? Eliot employs the use of symbolism when he presents the image of a cat that “licked its tongue into the corners of the evening”. This is seen to be an allegory for human existence that is characterised by the animals feline traits; selfish with only the means to be concerned of its subjective well being. The artificiality of the human psyche plagues modern reality in the world where Prufrock must “prepare a face to meet the faces”. Eliot examines this requirement to conform to society's standards in expense of our moral identities in his critique of modern life and it’s isolating consequences at the beginning of the twentieth century. Another fantastic paragraph with well argued points.

Eliot similarly critiques the repercussions of isolation within modern life at the beginning of the twentieth century within “Rhapsody”.  Similar to Prufrock, the author attributes the fragmented nature of human consciousness to the newly emerging modernist ideals which have replaced seemingly antiquated perspectives on the world. The metaphorical image of a “broken spring in a factory yard” see’s Eliot allude to our own consciousness being broken by the concept of industrialisation and modernity. Excellent. Typical of his modernist roots, the oeuvre of T.S Eliot occupies the idea that human individuals are isolated from one another because their understanding of the world is entirely subjective. This separation has thus caused modern life to become futile in regards to the possibility of human connection. It feels a little strange to be taking two sentences to explain a concept/way of thinking, once we've already started analysis/techniques. Try to get all of this out of the way early, then pepper us with analysis like a machine gun, one after the other. The persona within “Rhapsody” experiences this denial in the solipsistic image of a child that “pocketed a toy..along the quay”, and thus is unable to relate and resonate with his human counterparts as he “could see nothing behind that child’s eye”. Slightly retell - Be careful not to discuss characters as if they are anything beyond what they are constructed to be by the composer. The synecdoche employed is representative of this disconnected alienation as Eliot’s critique, that is focalised from his modernist perspective, is proved to be true through the persona’s experience. As alienation is presented to have such wrought consequences in the protagonists stream of consciousness, Eliot draws thematic connections between the role of modernity in the plight of individuals during the zeitgeist which he writes.  A slightly weaker paragraph than the others - Shifted a bit away from the strengths of priors and a bit more towards retell and over-explanation. Still great though!

Jeez, if you are in Tahlia's class, then you guys have got a heck of an English teacher - This is a fantastic response! I love your analytical style, extremely sophisticated, and you present your ideas clearly and with diction. Nicely done! Definitely to a Band 6 standard!

To improve, I think you could recognise the impact on the audience more directly. Remember, these images are created for an audience, so recognising the impact on the audience (both the audience of the context, and us universally) is important to answer the question holistically. In fact, answering the question is probably the thing that could let you down here - I notice that you've referenced distinctive images (or how images are created, or some similar idea to respond to the question) often in an implied sense - You use the word 'image' frequently. This is great! However, I'd like to see you make a more deliberate effort to include the idea of 'distinctive images' in your topic/concluding sentences, just to really hammer home that you are answering the question.

Have a flick through my comments and let me know if anything needs clarifying - Not a whole lot to say, this should perform extremely well! well done!

[tahliamag]

Thankyou so much for taking the time out to look over my response and for the feedback!! I really appreciate it

[maria1999]

Hey Maria! Was going to do this tomorrow, but have a sneaky suspicion that you and Tahlia have the same task due on Wednesday (or maybe two schools set the same question, definitely possible, aha!). In any case, your essay is also attached with feedback in bold:

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How does the poetry of T.S. Eliot use distinctive images to critique ‘modern life’ at the beginning of the Twentieth Century?

Distinctive imagery is used within creative mediums such as poetry to elicit meaning from their subject matter and encourage dynamic responses from their audiences. Fabulous intro! You might also want to mention that these images are 'crafted' through techniques. These images are particularly effective in critiquing the nature of modern society as prevalent in T.S Eliot's oeuvre, “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”. Eliot critiques modern life at the beginning of the 20th century as fragmented and weary. The desolate urban landscape that contextualises his poems within a world of figurative decay is demonstrative of his overall examination of the role of modernity and isolation within the lives of a modern day individual. I think this introduction works well - A brief breakdown of the themes/ideas you'll be exploring in the essay would be beneficial.

The influence of modernity is particularly prevalent within the imagery of modernist literature; The ramification of this cultural shift from romantic optimism to pessimistic cynicism saturates the imagery within poetry such as that of T.S Eliot, particularly within his poem “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Prufrock”. Love the idea of this intro, but expression seems just a tad off in the middle there. The landscape within the text is presented through a series of images of “half-deserted streets...that follow like a tedious argument of insidious intent”, illustrating Eliot’s critique that the journey of modern life is monotonous and with menacing intentions that lead individuals to believe that their existence has substance and meaning.  Great explanation, but what technique does this quote use? The concept is baseless without the technique. The manipulation of traditional punctuation transforms the entire first stanza into one, twelve lined sentence. This subversion of conventional poetic features manifests Eliot’s examination of reality as non-linear and non-sensical.  Great to see you discussing form, not just literary devices. Images of urban decay are used to effectively explore the contemporary societal sickness that has come as a result of newly emerging modernist ideals. This image of urban squalor is elicited in the vision of “restless nights in one-night cheap hotels” in the way that Eliot’s examines the moral decay that has infected society in the erosion of the ancient regime. Feline imagery is depicted in the personification of the “yellow smoke that rubbed its muzzle on the window panes”. The image of smoke is particularly prevalent within Eliot’s poetry as it alludes to the rapidly industrialising society at the beginning of the 20th century. Fabulous contextual link. The distinctive description of yellow smoke can be seen to have negative connotations as it is reminiscent of the yellowish tinge of jaundice which is further demonstration of how Eliot inherently links the notion of modernity with sickness. Try and have a more distinctive conclusion, a more obvious finish. Also make sure every quote has a technique - But a fantastic paragraph!

“Rhapsody on a Windy Night” see’s Eliot explore the same societal deprivation that has come as a result of “modernity”. The nonlinear structure of the poem is Eliot’s simultaneous comment that humanity is unable to connect the fragmented and broken pieces of its consciousness. The image of attenuated light through the “lunar synthesis” furthers this idea as Eliot alludes to humans only seeing a pale reflection of the truth. Technique?
 Try not to just use 'image,' HOW is the image created? The motif of light is carried through in the personification of the street lamps that “sputtered” and “muttered”. This in turn is reflective of the idea that mere inanimate objects are capable of more agency than human beings who are thus constrained by their context of the early 20th century. Fabulous. Eliot writes within a zeitgeist where society was in a transitory state with the “old ways” slowly becoming negligible. In wake of this, Eliot uses the metaphorical imagery of an “old carb with barnacles on his back” to illustrate the ancien regime that attempts to “grip” onto the fringes of rapidly modernising society. Within “Rhapsody” Eliot conveys the premise that because of this transition, there can only ever be glimpses of humanities former greatness. The olfactory imagery used in describing the “smells of dust and eau de Cologne” elicits this notion and the understanding of one’s own mortality. Eliot’s examination of the repercussions which the influence of modernity can bring to modern life is demonstrative of its role within the life of a modern day individual. Not much to say about this paragraph - Really stellar stuff! You've crafted your analysis excellently!

The isolating nature of modern life at a time where society was rapidly shifting in all facets is heavily explored in the oeuvre of T.S Eliot. The poem, “The Lovesong of J.Alfred Prufrock” is presented as a melancholy stream of consciousness as the persona makes his way throughout the streets of London isolated by his own self-inflicted alienation. A tad bit towards retell, but I see the reasoning behind it. Might be a little unnecessary. The aquatic imagery used in the poem, particularly that of the crab, see’s Eliot liken Prufrock’s consciousness to that of a “pair of ragged claws/scuttling across the floors of silent seas”. The strong characterisation of Prufrock as a crustacean that is continually lingering between predicaments, unable to make decisions is particularly effective in describing the state of modern man at beginning of the twentieth century. Excellent link - I like the structure of technique/quote, then explanation/context. It works well. If you can manage to craft a sentence with all of it in one go, that is the next step. Eliot examines the nature of  society at the time through his critique of industrialization and it’s place in modern life. The image of the “smoke that rises from the pipes of lonely men in shirt sleeves, leaning out of windows” alludes to Eliot attributing humanity’s state of fragmentation and their yearning to return to a previous state of being to the rapidly industrialising society of the 20th century. Great explanation - Again, try not to rely too much on 'imagery' as a technique when discussing distinctive images. HOW are the images created? Eliot employs the use of symbolism when he presents the image of a cat that “licked its tongue into the corners of the evening”. This is seen to be an allegory for human existence that is characterised by the animals feline traits; selfish with only the means to be concerned of its subjective well being. The artificiality of the human psyche plagues modern reality in the world where Prufrock must “prepare a face to meet the faces”. Eliot examines this requirement to conform to society's standards in expense of our moral identities in his critique of modern life and it’s isolating consequences at the beginning of the twentieth century. Another fantastic paragraph with well argued points.

Eliot similarly critiques the repercussions of isolation within modern life at the beginning of the twentieth century within “Rhapsody”.  Similar to Prufrock, the author attributes the fragmented nature of human consciousness to the newly emerging modernist ideals which have replaced seemingly antiquated perspectives on the world. The metaphorical image of a “broken spring in a factory yard” see’s Eliot allude to our own consciousness being broken by the concept of industrialisation and modernity. Excellent. Typical of his modernist roots, the oeuvre of T.S Eliot occupies the idea that human individuals are isolated from one another because their understanding of the world is entirely subjective. This separation has thus caused modern life to become futile in regards to the possibility of human connection. It feels a little strange to be taking two sentences to explain a concept/way of thinking, once we've already started analysis/techniques. Try to get all of this out of the way early, then pepper us with analysis like a machine gun, one after the other. The persona within “Rhapsody” experiences this denial in the solipsistic image of a child that “pocketed a toy..along the quay”, and thus is unable to relate and resonate with his human counterparts as he “could see nothing behind that child’s eye”. Slightly retell - Be careful not to discuss characters as if they are anything beyond what they are constructed to be by the composer. The synecdoche employed is representative of this disconnected alienation as Eliot’s critique, that is focalised from his modernist perspective, is proved to be true through the persona’s experience. As alienation is presented to have such wrought consequences in the protagonists stream of consciousness, Eliot draws thematic connections between the role of modernity in the plight of individuals during the zeitgeist which he writes.  A slightly weaker paragraph than the others - Shifted a bit away from the strengths of priors and a bit more towards retell and over-explanation. Still great though!

Jeez, if you are in Tahlia's class, then you guys have got a heck of an English teacher - This is a fantastic response! I love your analytical style, extremely sophisticated, and you present your ideas clearly and with diction. Nicely done! Definitely to a Band 6 standard!

To improve, I think you could recognise the impact on the audience more directly. Remember, these images are created for an audience, so recognising the impact on the audience (both the audience of the context, and us universally) is important to answer the question holistically. In fact, answering the question is probably the thing that could let you down here - I notice that you've referenced distinctive images (or how images are created, or some similar idea to respond to the question) often in an implied sense - You use the word 'image' frequently. This is great! However, I'd like to see you make a more deliberate effort to include the idea of 'distinctive images' in your topic/concluding sentences, just to really hammer home that you are answering the question.

Have a flick through my comments and let me know if anything needs clarifying - Not a whole lot to say, this should perform extremely well! well done!

Thank you so much Jamon! I really appreciate the feedback on the essay! I'll definitely be taking it on board!

[marcusgrahamm]

Hi,

This is my Module B essay for Citizen Kane!

I would appreciate some feedback, I just don't know if I'm answering the question directly enough.

If you have an estimated mark out of 15 as well that would be great

Thanks!!

Spoiler

Citizen Kane remains one of the best films of all time because Welles deliberately challenges his audience throughout. To what extent does this perspective align with your personal understanding of the film?

Orson Welles dares the audience to question their understanding of humanity’s values and sense of self through the 1941 revolutionary film ‘Citizen Kane’. Standing as an extended metaphor this cinematic masterpiece sensualises the ideology of love based strictly around the philosophies of powers corrupting nature, betrayal of moralities and the lasting impact of besmirched naivety. Consequently, the relatable thematic concerns corresponding with a multiplicity of perceptions challenges the onlooker to derive their own significance and meaning to comprehend the mysterious and provocative characterisation and plot line. Thus, the utilisation of figurative techniques and symbolism aids considerably within the newsreel’s presentation of the overarching themes that ultimately anchor the textual veracity within this progressive, ground breaking piece of cinematography. 

Welles communicates the social concerns of accession to power and overwhelming wealth throughout Kane. Accordingly, the audience is prompted to revaluate their moral obligations and allegorically deduce new found personalised interpretations, that correlate to their respective zeitgeists. Kane’s success in procuring the American Dream is emblematical in illustrating the United States exiting of a period of Great Depression to new found economic prosperity and fortune. The newsreel romanticised the ideology of public knowledge and acquired findings within private areas of politics, and societal hierarchy rather than acting in form with traditional papers exposition of true, honest stories. Hence, “News on the March” accompanied by a loud, upbeat narrative voice instigated fascination and interest for “Lifestyle of the Rich and Famous” for the society of this still grim context. Furthermore, the discussion of a mythological concept, being the American Dream, is consistently highlighted as a depurative and unrealistic notion. Watchers are faced to assume and dictate individual interpretations when Kane sees his demise due to an unruly lust for wealth and authority. Ultimately, success and power smother him, in his holistic pursuit of happiness which is crushed by this illusive, disparaging dream, which is simply that – a dream. Consequently, Welles applies leitmotifs and contextually contemporary issues of consumerism and materialism to allow onlookers to rethink their avaricious attitudes and covetous blindness. Steadily throughout the piece we see Kane illustrated in a somewhat god alike light whereby low angle shots and deep focus scenes showcase him in a dominant, often higher stance then other characters. Aiding this analogy is Leland’s decree “he was disappointed in the world so he built his own, an absolute monarchy” connecting to this belief is Kane’s political campaign speech scene where he is framed in a medium, low angle shot before a gigantic poster of himself, subsequently stressing his prominence and control. Moreover, Kane’s last word “Rosebud” acts as a recurrent motif whereby the viewer comes to fully understand how the obsessive nature of humankind today can ultimately destroy us. Developed to embody a synecdoche for the bliss of infanthood and metaphorical coldness of a soul starved of love the audience now pictures Kane as a broken man, faulting to realise that financial opulence does not equal to a fulfilled, joyful livelihood. Critic Roger Ebert assents, “Rosebud is the emblem of the security, hope and innocence of childhood, which a man can spend his life seeking to regain” (1998). Supporting this view is a panning shot across Kane’s surplus of belongings in the vast expanse that was his home. This is symbolised through a visual metaphor of Rosebud burning which develops the impression that whilst materialistic items provide a sense of happiness the instability of prior relationships, along with an isolated and alienated lifestyle are unsustainable and eventually result in downfall. Consequently, through the ideological notion of power’s cyclical and destructive nature the audience is confronted with relatable affairs and interpretable content amidst Kane to derive their own ideas and meanings from the film. Thus, reiterating why Citizen Kane’s thought provoking viewpoints dictate it as the Holy Grail of cinematography.

The meaning of love and relationships is combatted consistently throughout Citizen Kane, often provoking the viewer to reflect on the significance of interpersonal connections. The zeitgeists influence of wealth and consumeristic drive was exhibited through Kane’s building of Xanadu for second wife Susan. Interestingly, this corresponds with William Randolph Hearst’s prestigious 1919 San Simeon property. Hence, the audience is prompted here to grapple with the idea of love, as Welles satirizes the conceptual idea of a true, transcendental relationships when wealth is instituted into the equation.  Through the mis-en-scene of Charle’s naïve years, his relationship with the mother is exemplified by the ultra-realism evoked by deep focus shots. Here we see Kane illustrated through a window frame in the background of a deep focus scene frolicking in the snow. This conjures the inkling that his life is uncontrollable and set on a direct past, fundamentally foreshadowing his eventual downfall. Psychoanalyst Laura Mulvey proposes that his personal demise, and inability to maintain close associations with forthcoming wives and intimate persons was a direct result of Freudian “pre-oedipal love” and childhood trauma sparked from an absence of maternal love. Welles emotively presents this thematic area to the audience in a domineering light to allow onlookers to grasp the understanding that parental bonds shape their young’s identity. With the utilisation of somewhat depressive and confronting non-diegetic sound, along with the repetition of Mr’s Kane’s melodic theme when Susan parades her motherly traits, we can interpret this as Charle’s longing for love in its most natural form. Nonetheless, due to his upbringing in a world where money supposedly could create happiness, which was a common occurrence in the prospering economy of the post-depression 1940’s, he reciprocated this attitude onto Susan Alexander. Ironically, Kane showers Susan with luxurious gifts and objects only to find that he isolates himself from their bond due to his blindness of giving her the life of “what she never wanted”. Therefore, we as the audience come occasion to witness how lack of love in childhood fogs the ability to genuinely cultivate a love. Yet again Welles portrays a highly relatable idea for both contemporary and past societies through the fragmentation of marriage. Specifically, the long shot illustrating Susan solving puzzles in the cavernous mansion not only acts as an allusion to her own broken identity but rather echoes the idea of Kane and Alexander’s emotional detachment and dead connection. The shadow pictured on Charle’s face accompanied by chiaroscuro lighting are symbolic of his false identity, incomprehension of himself and who he really is. As suggested by Bossley Crowther (1941) “For what shall a man profit if he shall gain the world and lose his soul?”. This reinforces how the audience is challenged throughout the plot to envisage natural love, opposed to a detrimental, materialistic, and emotionless based connection. Subsequently, through Kane’s failure to attain a stable, durable relationship, Welles highlights to the viewers the calamitous effects of failing to satisfy innate human desires in a quest to connect on a deep, intimate level with others.

Conclusively, Orson Welles’ Citizen Kane tackles the impact troubled naivety implores on true love and relationships, as well as how ascent to power and pursuit of all things wealth oriented enact demise and downfall. This breakthrough in cinematography instituted anchoring thematic ideologies, which were aided by insightful characterisations and film techniques that allowed and provoked audiences of each and every decade since to find personalised and greater messages of individual concerns and humanities greater troubles. Surmising this film holistically Nikhil Letha-Soman’s analogy, described Kane’s achievements succinctly- “This movie is truly great as it manages to rise above its plot and characters, and to achieve something more universal; something that we could/can relate to and connect with our own lives.” 

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[elysepopplewell]

Hi,

This is my Module B essay for Citizen Kane!

I would appreciate some feedback, I just don't know if I'm answering the question directly enough.

If you have an estimated mark out of 15 as well that would be great

Thanks!!

Spoiler

Citizen Kane remains one of the best films of all time because Welles deliberately challenges his audience throughout. To what extent does this perspective align with your personal understanding of the film?

Orson Welles dares the audience to question their understanding of humanity’s values and sense of self through the 1941 revolutionary film ‘Citizen Kane’. Standing as an extended metaphor this cinematic masterpiece sensualises the ideology of love based strictly around the philosophies of powers corrupting nature, betrayal of moralities and the lasting impact of besmirched naivety. Consequently, the relatable thematic concerns corresponding with a multiplicity of perceptions challenges the onlooker to derive their own significance and meaning to comprehend the mysterious and provocative characterisation and plot line. Thus, the utilisation of figurative techniques and symbolism aids considerably within the newsreel’s presentation of the overarching themes that ultimately anchor the textual veracity within this progressive, ground breaking piece of cinematography. 

Welles communicates the social concerns of accession to power and overwhelming wealth throughout Kane. Accordingly, the audience is prompted to revaluate their moral obligations and allegorically deduce new found personalised interpretations, that correlate to their respective zeitgeists. Kane’s success in procuring the American Dream is emblematical in illustrating the United States exiting of a period of Great Depression to new found economic prosperity and fortune. The newsreel romanticised the ideology of public knowledge and acquired findings within private areas of politics, and societal hierarchy rather than acting in form with traditional papers exposition of true, honest stories. Hence, “News on the March” accompanied by a loud, upbeat narrative voice instigated fascination and interest for “Lifestyle of the Rich and Famous” for the society of this still grim context. Furthermore, the discussion of a mythological concept, being the American Dream, is consistently highlighted as a depurative and unrealistic notion. Watchers are faced to assume and dictate individual interpretations when Kane sees his demise due to an unruly lust for wealth and authority. Ultimately, success and power smother him, in his holistic pursuit of happiness which is crushed by this illusive, disparaging dream, which is simply that – a dream. Consequently, Welles applies leitmotifs and contextually contemporary issues of consumerism and materialism to allow onlookers to rethink their avaricious attitudes and covetous blindness. Steadily throughout the piece we see Kane illustrated in a somewhat god alike light whereby low angle shots and deep focus scenes showcase him in a dominant, often higher stance then other characters. Aiding this analogy is Leland’s decree “he was disappointed in the world so he built his own, an absolute monarchy” connecting to this belief is Kane’s political campaign speech scene where he is framed in a medium, low angle shot before a gigantic poster of himself, subsequently stressing his prominence and control. Moreover, Kane’s last word “Rosebud” acts as a recurrent motif whereby the viewer comes to fully understand how the obsessive nature of humankind today can ultimately destroy us. Developed to embody a synecdoche for the bliss of infanthood and metaphorical coldness of a soul starved of love the audience now pictures Kane as a broken man, faulting to realise that financial opulence does not equal to a fulfilled, joyful livelihood. Critic Roger Ebert assents, “Rosebud is the emblem of the security, hope and innocence of childhood, which a man can spend his life seeking to regain” (1998). Supporting this view is a panning shot across Kane’s surplus of belongings in the vast expanse that was his home. This is symbolised through a visual metaphor of Rosebud burning which develops the impression that whilst materialistic items provide a sense of happiness the instability of prior relationships, along with an isolated and alienated lifestyle are unsustainable and eventually result in downfall. Consequently, through the ideological notion of power’s cyclical and destructive nature the audience is confronted with relatable affairs and interpretable content amidst Kane to derive their own ideas and meanings from the film. Thus, reiterating why Citizen Kane’s thought provoking viewpoints dictate it as the Holy Grail of cinematography.

The meaning of love and relationships is combatted consistently throughout Citizen Kane, often provoking the viewer to reflect on the significance of interpersonal connections. The zeitgeists influence of wealth and consumeristic drive was exhibited through Kane’s building of Xanadu for second wife Susan. Interestingly, this corresponds with William Randolph Hearst’s prestigious 1919 San Simeon property. Hence, the audience is prompted here to grapple with the idea of love, as Welles satirizes the conceptual idea of a true, transcendental relationships when wealth is instituted into the equation.  Through the mis-en-scene of Charle’s naïve years, his relationship with the mother is exemplified by the ultra-realism evoked by deep focus shots. Here we see Kane illustrated through a window frame in the background of a deep focus scene frolicking in the snow. This conjures the inkling that his life is uncontrollable and set on a direct past, fundamentally foreshadowing his eventual downfall. Psychoanalyst Laura Mulvey proposes that his personal demise, and inability to maintain close associations with forthcoming wives and intimate persons was a direct result of Freudian “pre-oedipal love” and childhood trauma sparked from an absence of maternal love. Welles emotively presents this thematic area to the audience in a domineering light to allow onlookers to grasp the understanding that parental bonds shape their young’s identity. With the utilisation of somewhat depressive and confronting non-diegetic sound, along with the repetition of Mr’s Kane’s melodic theme when Susan parades her motherly traits, we can interpret this as Charle’s longing for love in its most natural form. Nonetheless, due to his upbringing in a world where money supposedly could create happiness, which was a common occurrence in the prospering economy of the post-depression 1940’s, he reciprocated this attitude onto Susan Alexander. Ironically, Kane showers Susan with luxurious gifts and objects only to find that he isolates himself from their bond due to his blindness of giving her the life of “what she never wanted”. Therefore, we as the audience come occasion to witness how lack of love in childhood fogs the ability to genuinely cultivate a love. Yet again Welles portrays a highly relatable idea for both contemporary and past societies through the fragmentation of marriage. Specifically, the long shot illustrating Susan solving puzzles in the cavernous mansion not only acts as an allusion to her own broken identity but rather echoes the idea of Kane and Alexander’s emotional detachment and dead connection. The shadow pictured on Charle’s face accompanied by chiaroscuro lighting are symbolic of his false identity, incomprehension of himself and who he really is. As suggested by Bossley Crowther (1941) “For what shall a man profit if he shall gain the world and lose his soul?”. This reinforces how the audience is challenged throughout the plot to envisage natural love, opposed to a detrimental, materialistic, and emotionless based connection. Subsequently, through Kane’s failure to attain a stable, durable relationship, Welles highlights to the viewers the calamitous effects of failing to satisfy innate human desires in a quest to connect on a deep, intimate level with others.

Conclusively, Orson Welles’ Citizen Kane tackles the impact troubled naivety implores on true love and relationships, as well as how ascent to power and pursuit of all things wealth oriented enact demise and downfall. This breakthrough in cinematography instituted anchoring thematic ideologies, which were aided by insightful characterisations and film techniques that allowed and provoked audiences of each and every decade since to find personalised and greater messages of individual concerns and humanities greater troubles. Surmising this film holistically Nikhil Letha-Soman’s analogy, described Kane’s achievements succinctly- “This movie is truly great as it manages to rise above its plot and characters, and to achieve something more universal; something that we could/can relate to and connect with our own lives.” 

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[marcusgrahamm]

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[ProfLayton2000]

Hey could I get advice on how to write an introduction for mod B? Here is my current introduction to the question "In the context of your critical study how do relationships embodied in the play resonate with your understanding of loyalty":

William Shakespeare’s Hamlet (1603) is often considered by many critics to have encapsulated the human condition from a variety of angles through the characterization of Hamlet and his interactions with those around him. Understanding the importance of these relationships is, as in my understanding of the play, critical to understanding what drives Hamlet. Shakespeare highlights the importance of loyalty primarily by exploring disloyalty and its consequences. This is especially true for Hamlet, whose endless quest for unmasking disloyalty is what motivates him throughout the play. Of highest importance, however is Hamlet’s relationship to himself, and his determination to stay loyal to his ways of thinking as a Renaissance humanist.

[jamonwindeyer]

Thats totally understandable!

I just shared a heap of resources on other forums to assist others.

Would you be able to take a look now?!

Thank you so much!!

You are awesome Marcus! Just to clarify, you're definitely on our list and we'll have some feedback for you asap!

Hey could I get advice on how to write an introduction for mod B? Here is my current introduction to the question "In the context of your critical study how do relationships embodied in the play resonate with your understanding of loyalty":

Hey! You should give this guide a read if you haven't already, to give you an idea of the sorts of things Module B requires - And I'm happy to skim your intro! I popped a few comments in bold:

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William Shakespeare’s Hamlet (1603) is often considered by many critics to have encapsulated the human condition from a variety of angles through the characterization of Hamlet and his interactions with those around him. This first sentence seems a little vague and non-committal - By saying a 'variety of critics' you are not really hammering it home as your own personal argument. Further, the 'human condition' is a very vague concept. Understanding the importance of these relationships is, as in my understanding of the play, critical to understanding what drives Hamlet. There's a lot of debate about this - But avoid the use of personal pronouns in your essay. The personal perspective comes across in your writing - Keep the language formal. Shakespeare highlights the importance of loyalty primarily by exploring disloyalty and its consequences. Good. This is especially true for Hamlet, whose endless quest for unmasking disloyalty is what motivates him throughout the play. Try not to retell things that happen to the characters. Of highest importance, however is Hamlet’s relationship to himself, and his determination to stay loyal to his ways of thinking as a Renaissance humanist. Again, try not to be character focused - Be composer focused, talk about what Shakespeare does to represent ideas to his audience.

I think this is a great start - I think you need to cut back on describing Hamlet/retelling things that happen to Hamlet, and focus instead on the ideas Shakespeare is presenting and how he goes about presenting those ideas to his audience

[scienceislife]

Hello,
So this is my first comparative essay for Module A. We are doing Richard III and Looking for Richard. With essays the main problem I seem to have is properly analysing in each question and giving enough information, though I already feel like my paragraphs are too long. If you could please let me know if there is enough analysis and if my information is relevant in regards to the question?
Many thanks and much appreciation to the time you guys put into helping all of us.