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Re: English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)
« Reply #735 on: October 10, 2016, 12:35:36 pm »
Hi IkeaandOfficeworks,

Great to see you have already got 18 posts!! Unfortunately however, you need 30 posts to get an essay marked through these busy times of the HSC. This is only 12 more posts and is easily done! Hanging around HSC discussion threads, general question thread is a good way.

And remember asking or answering a question counts as a post, although games sections' don't.

Looking forward to seeing your post count hit 30 :)

 ::)You should be an english mod ahaha ;D
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Re: English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)
« Reply #736 on: October 10, 2016, 12:44:44 pm »
::)You should be an english mod ahaha ;D

Haha ;D i'd me a mod of half of atarnotes then what with Religion, Maths and Science im a mod of already

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« Reply #737 on: October 10, 2016, 12:46:36 pm »
Haha ;D i'd me a mod of half of atarnotes then what with Religion, Maths and Science im a mod of already

Do you just literally ask what mod you want to be...
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« Reply #738 on: October 10, 2016, 12:54:52 pm »
Do you just literally ask what mod you want to be...

Nah brendan decides based on your knowledge and where you are most active. But you can ask what mod you want to be, just dont always get accepted into that ;D

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« Reply #739 on: October 10, 2016, 12:57:55 pm »
Nah brendan decides based on your knowledge and where you are most active. But you can ask what mod you want to be, just dont always get accepted into that ;D

ahaha noice, you remembered your essays/quotes yet?
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Re: English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)
« Reply #740 on: October 10, 2016, 01:03:29 pm »
ahaha noice, you remembered your essays/quotes yet?
Depends what module you are talking about :D

Mod B- Cloudstreet- got quite a lot in my quote bank
Mod A- KR3/LFR- got enough to get by, need to do more on context and values
Mod C- Art of Travel and ORT- well, im sure ill think of something lol

Im not a big fan of remembering my essays though, only my creative :)

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Re: English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)
« Reply #741 on: October 10, 2016, 01:48:04 pm »
Hey pretty sure I have 30 posts haha, was wondering if you had the time to look over my Module A essay again. All of my other essays bumped up in trials except this one :( Stayed the same at 16/20. Any and all help appreciated  ;D thank you!!

MODULE A: ESSAY
Question: The challenge of living your own life is an idea that connects Pride and Prejudice and Letter to Alice on First Reading Jane Austen. How is this idea shaped and reshaped in these texts from different contexts?


Traditional opinions in regards to the ways individuals should live have developed and changed across contexts. Thus, composes will continue to consider what it means to “live” in different ways, as to remain relevant to their context, audience and universal responders. This is evident through a comparison of Jane Austen’s novel Pride and Prejudice, and Fay Weldon’s epistolary work Letter’s to Alice. Despite their different contexts, both challenge the status quo of marriage, and how it impacts individual freedoms, through reshaping the themes of class, gender and the rebellion. Austen challenges her society through the actions and attitudes of her characters, while Weldon re-contextualizes Austen’s critique in order to validate their shared desire for social change.

The social cues dictated by a strict class structure has remained a relevant thematic concern across contexts. In comparing the work of Austen and Weldon, it is evident that Weldon has appropriated the issues related to this challenge to suit her contemporary world.  Austen was writing during the Regency period, a time of strict social codes and structures, whereby an individual’s class greatly affected their ability to live freely, demonstrated through Austen’s use of characterization, whereby the simplicity of the gentry class (the Bennets) is juxtaposed against the extravagant arrogance and narcissism of the aristocratic Lady Catherine De Bough, in order to textually keep “the distinction of rank preserved.” Austen’s use of imagery also alludes to this theme, as she vividly describes the luxury of Mr. Darcy’s Pemberley estate in comparison with the modesty of the Bennet’s dwelling.
Through marriage the strict social hierarchy was maintained, however also subverted, through providing the opportunity for social mobility. This intrinsic link between marriage and class remains a critical theme which Weldon explores further, through re-contextualizing Austen’s perception of her society’s social stratification, enabling contemporary readers a more enlightened understanding of the novel. This is achieved through her discussion of the options for women outside marriage and its purpose of providing financial security, utilizing satire and juxtaposition to emphasis this further, stating that marriage “is the stuff of our [contemporary] women’s magazines, but it was the stuff of their life [during the Regency period], their very existence.”
Weldon also uses explicit inter-textual reference to what she perceives to be subversive elements of Austen’s work to deal with Austen’s criticisms more directly. According to Weldon, Mr. Darcy “Marry[ing] where he loved, not where he ought,” demonstrates Austen seditiousness, suggesting the superiority of a marriage based in love rather than socio-economic necessity. Fiction, according to Weldon, enables readers with insight into the freedoms and rights they desire, but may not be afforded to them in reality. Through Literature Austen suggests to the reader they deserve more, and that it can be attained through the search for knowledge. Through Weldon’s reshaping of key themes within Pride and Prejudice, the reader is able to better recognize Austen’s aims, to expose the flawed nature of class divisions, and the triumph of personal traits such as intelligence over established social conventions. 

The role of women and how it creates challenges within individual’s lives is a key theme with inter-contextual relevance, as evident through both Pride and Prejudice and Letters to Alice. In order to understand the hyperbolic attitude of Mrs. Bennet, one “must understand... the world in which Jane Austen was born,” writings within a patriarchal society, her books “studded with [examples of] male whims taking priority … over female happiness.” 
During Austen’s time it was almost impossible for women to live independently, almost always at the mercy of male relatives for financial and social stability. Marriage enabled many families, to maintain social security put into jeopardy due to misogynistic inheritance laws. Austen represents this through the desperation of the Bennets’ situation, demonstrated through her characterization of Mrs. Bennet making it “the business of her life to get her daughters married,” before Mr Bennet dies.
Through the re-contextualization of Austen though Letters to Alice, Weldon enables her contemporary audience to better understand the plight of women at the time. Weldon was writing within a society experiencing the impact of second-wave feminism. Women could now vote and take up work previously reserved for men, and though the domestic expectations of women were still prevalent, it was now facing major opposition. Society had made significant progress since Austen’s time in regards to the abilities and rights of women to live independently. For her post-feminism audience to better understand the desperation of the women in Pride and Prejudice, Weldon utilizes contextual detail and statistics to clarify the characters’ motives, reinforcing the struggles of the past that today are no longer an issue. For example, when, according to Weldon, only 30% of women were married, and one of the most popular alternatives was prostitution, Mrs. Bennet’s desperation appears justified.
Through “linking the past of that society with its future,” and bridging the generational gap between two contexts, Weldon instils empathy within her contemporary audience, and substantiates Austen’s writings as a subversive text, maintaining the role of “Literature with a capital L” as key in challenging the values and attitudes of society.

The use of a rebellious character is a key technique employed by subversive texts, enabling the author an outlet in which to comment upon society from within the story in order to promote a similar sense of “rebellion”. Both Pride and Prejudice and Letters to Alice are connected through their use of rebellious characters, challenging the beliefs of those around them. Within Pride and Prejudice, Elizabeth Bennet, whom Austen utilizes as her authorial voice, does not accept the established conventions of her period, desiring for herself the freedom to decide her own life-path. This is evident through Austen’s use of the narrator point of view, in which the reader gains access to Elizabeth’s thoughts and emotions in regards to various major plot moments – such as Mr. Collins proposal.  Thus, as the reader is gaining Elizabeth’s perspective upon the events that unfold, along with the comments from other characters that affirm this perception, Elizabeth’s subversiveness is praised rather than discouraged. Through Elizabeth’s action, attitudes and triumphs, Austen implores her readership to rebel also, as it will lead to greater happiness. Weldon utilizes the rebellious character Alice to teach her readership the importance of individual freedom. Despite Aunt Fay’s inflexible advice on how to achieve success as a writer, Alice rebels against her Aunt’s guidance, and achieves overwhelming success on her own. To be a subversive writer, one must also be a subversive reader, and through Alice’s success, Weldon informs her readers that though they have just read her beliefs, it is critical that they form their own. Therefore, it is evident that through the use of rebellious characters, Pride and Prejudice and Letters to Alice implore their readership to form their own values independent from societal influence.

Therefore, through their critiques of the role of class and women in regards to marriage and use of rebellious character, it is clear that both Austen’s Pride and Prejudice and Weldon’s Letters to Alice, despite their socio-historical differences, are connected through their exploration of the challenges of living your own life within a society that continually suppresses your freedom, as they both serve to reshape not only our understand of each other, but of our contemporary society.
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Re: English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)
« Reply #742 on: October 10, 2016, 01:52:08 pm »
Hey Jamon since you marked my Mod C essay i was wondering if you could look at the introduction again to see if I've managed to convey it clearer? (The question was Representations of people and politics often reveal either the best or worst of our world.
How is this communicated in the texts you have studied? In your response, consider the motivations driving the events in your texts.)

In society, people in politics have been in a position that have allowed them to impose a beneficial or negative impact on one’s perspectives to reveal either the best or worst of one’s world. In order to do so one must look at their society and take notice of the way it can be perceived. This can be shown through the motives and messages that have been received by the audience. People in a position of power have the ability to alter people’s perspectives to portray a particular message, this is evident in Barry Levinson’s 1997 film Wag the Dog and Lincoln @ Gettysburg a political documentary published in 1992. In Wag the Dog the representation of people in politics develop the notion of manipulation whilst in Lincoln @ Gettysburg develop ideas of empowerment and encouragement to reflect society’s views.

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« Reply #743 on: October 10, 2016, 01:58:40 pm »
Module C essay
Hello, Id like my essay checked as its my weakest Module, and can I have detailed feedback as teachers dont really help, also a mark out of 15 i guess? Thank You so much... :)

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« Reply #744 on: October 10, 2016, 02:13:13 pm »
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« Reply #746 on: October 10, 2016, 07:41:22 pm »
This is my 2/2 Essays just submitted (other one is on previous page)

Hey Guys!

Could you please also supply a mark out of 15.

Thanks,
Bobby

Discovery is a process which everyone goes through, to uncover hidden abilities and differences which are experienced in diversified ways including constant struggles and challenges. Ang Lee's dramatic film ‘Life of Pi' (2012) captures the idea of discovering hidden abilities whilst also drawing focus to the will to live. Sylvia Plath's 1962 poem ‘Cut’, focuses on the assertion of abilities, justifying its process of discovery whilst commenting on the symbolic subject of mortality. Both texts personas feature transformations where they uncover hidden agendas and reconsider what was lost and now found.

Through surpassing boundaries and attempting perilous journeys, the exploration of the physical, spiritual and emotional can be assessed by transformation. As Pi undergoes perilous journeys, he makes spiritual, physical and emotional discoveries, such as the unique relationship between animal and man whilst also exploring the concept of mortality being an ambiguous phenomenon . Self discovery is explored towards the middle of the film as Throughout the film it is conveyed that Pi’s religious beliefs draw on his need for survival which displays his use of spiritual discoveries and the many beliefs included in each. Lee's use of a long shot accentuates the competition for dominance between Parker and Pi, with the sea representing how loneliness and desperation has forced the physical and emotion transformation of the persona. Ang Lee uses the characters stance to show how dominance plays a key role in transformation and discovering hidden abilities. MORE ANALYSIS NEEDED

Plath commonly explores the ambiguous notion of societal ideals for women, relating to her audience during the 60’s who wanted to expedite away from these Ideals. Featuring first person narration which incorporates ten stanzas, this poem elaborates on how Plath's suicidal agendas derive from constricted feelings of being an educated women in a restricted society analysing where women were subjugated towards being housewives. On contemplating her bleeding theme, the persona muses “Out of a gap, a million soldiers run", Imagery connecting Plath's context of her husband’s adultery as she felt the urge of suicide Plath's persona constantly reconsiders what is known as she always ventured to the option of suicide. From this complex imagery of welfare, the hyperbole elaborates on the fickleness this urge brings once it feels alright the in suddenly disperses into depression. ‘Cut’ is a mysterious poem which powerfully incorporates the will to live as well as discovering hidden potential competence.

Ang Lee utilises symbols frequently in ‘Life of Pi’ focusing on the ambiguous meanings of hurdles in Pi's transformation, allowing him to explore a range of perceptions. As Pi has a strong spiritual connection, he is able to adapt to his new environments with the help of Richard Parker. Through symbolic imagery It is clearly evident that the use of water, represents loneliness, while the life raft provides hope albeit religious faith is the main focus. The mysterious island represents the biblical allusion of the Christian Garden of Eden and Orange, a frequent colour possesses survival qualities. There is a sense of spiritual discovery from the symbolic metaphor of the tooth featured at the mysterious island, not being a voluntary transformation, Pi remembers his Christian values as well as animalistic qualities. This scene incorporates Christian spiritual connections to the garden of Eden providing a heaven and hell contrast against the day and night of the island, which is alluded through the switching between long and extreme close shots, Showing the audience the features of a religious exploration. As Ang Lee highlights Pi’s adaption to discovery, he rediscovers his spiritual beliefs.

Various types of Symbols are incorporated in Plath's works which feature issues towards her troubled marriage, unresolved conflicts with parents and her personal vision of herself. The poem being an extended metaphor, entices the audience drawing ambiguous conclusions to Plath's exploration of self. For example, the simple symbolic notion of "blood" represents assorted meanings such as genetics, life force and family/personal history. Phallic Symbol is used in line two of the poem when the speaker says “My thumb instead of an onion” assassinating with male dominance which was prevalent. The symbolic metaphor incorporated in “saboteur, Kamikaze man” uses censurae to insure the power of depression and self destruction is highlighted through the kamikaze suicidal nature which was always apparent to her. From the numerous symbols included in "Cut", Plath successfully conveys her exploration on idealistic views of how social constraint has  a pessimistic effect on women.

The transformation which is evident in everybody’s process of discovery, involved uncovering hidden and known desires. 'Life of Pi' reflects the transformation of a child whose inevitable  responsibility is to grow up, being available through continuous challenges along his journey. The persona from 'Cut' experiences something for the first time which is revealed to have negatively influenced her, making the discovery that traitorous "blood" represents the fickle relationship between herself and husband, a common misconception of the 60's. As both of these texts relate to personal transformation, they also distinguish ideas of graphic symbolism and the need for a chance to live.
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Re: English Advanced Essay Marking (Modules Only)
« Reply #747 on: October 10, 2016, 08:44:00 pm »
This is my 2/2 Essays just submitted (other one is on previous page)

Hey Guys!

Could you please also supply a mark out of 15.

Thanks,
Bobby

Discovery is a process which everyone goes through, to uncover hidden abilities and differences which are experienced in diversified ways including constant struggles and challenges. Ang Lee's dramatic film ‘Life of Pi' (2012) captures the idea of discovering hidden abilities whilst also drawing focus to the will to live. Sylvia Plath's 1962 poem ‘Cut’, focuses on the assertion of abilities, justifying its process of discovery whilst commenting on the symbolic subject of mortality. Both texts personas feature transformations where they uncover hidden agendas and reconsider what was lost and now found.

Through surpassing boundaries and attempting perilous journeys, the exploration of the physical, spiritual and emotional can be assessed by transformation. As Pi undergoes perilous journeys, he makes spiritual, physical and emotional discoveries, such as the unique relationship between animal and man whilst also exploring the concept of mortality being an ambiguous phenomenon . Self discovery is explored towards the middle of the film as Throughout the film it is conveyed that Pi’s religious beliefs draw on his need for survival which displays his use of spiritual discoveries and the many beliefs included in each. Lee's use of a long shot accentuates the competition for dominance between Parker and Pi, with the sea representing how loneliness and desperation has forced the physical and emotion transformation of the persona. Ang Lee uses the characters stance to show how dominance plays a key role in transformation and discovering hidden abilities. MORE ANALYSIS NEEDED

Plath commonly explores the ambiguous notion of societal ideals for women, relating to her audience during the 60’s who wanted to expedite away from these Ideals. Featuring first person narration which incorporates ten stanzas, this poem elaborates on how Plath's suicidal agendas derive from constricted feelings of being an educated women in a restricted society analysing where women were subjugated towards being housewives. On contemplating her bleeding theme, the persona muses “Out of a gap, a million soldiers run", Imagery connecting Plath's context of her husband’s adultery as she felt the urge of suicide Plath's persona constantly reconsiders what is known as she always ventured to the option of suicide. From this complex imagery of welfare, the hyperbole elaborates on the fickleness this urge brings once it feels alright the in suddenly disperses into depression. ‘Cut’ is a mysterious poem which powerfully incorporates the will to live as well as discovering hidden potential competence.

Ang Lee utilises symbols frequently in ‘Life of Pi’ focusing on the ambiguous meanings of hurdles in Pi's transformation, allowing him to explore a range of perceptions. As Pi has a strong spiritual connection, he is able to adapt to his new environments with the help of Richard Parker. Through symbolic imagery It is clearly evident that the use of water, represents loneliness, while the life raft provides hope albeit religious faith is the main focus. The mysterious island represents the biblical allusion of the Christian Garden of Eden and Orange, a frequent colour possesses survival qualities. There is a sense of spiritual discovery from the symbolic metaphor of the tooth featured at the mysterious island, not being a voluntary transformation, Pi remembers his Christian values as well as animalistic qualities. This scene incorporates Christian spiritual connections to the garden of Eden providing a heaven and hell contrast against the day and night of the island, which is alluded through the switching between long and extreme close shots, Showing the audience the features of a religious exploration. As Ang Lee highlights Pi’s adaption to discovery, he rediscovers his spiritual beliefs.

Various types of Symbols are incorporated in Plath's works which feature issues towards her troubled marriage, unresolved conflicts with parents and her personal vision of herself. The poem being an extended metaphor, entices the audience drawing ambiguous conclusions to Plath's exploration of self. For example, the simple symbolic notion of "blood" represents assorted meanings such as genetics, life force and family/personal history. Phallic Symbol is used in line two of the poem when the speaker says “My thumb instead of an onion” assassinating with male dominance which was prevalent. The symbolic metaphor incorporated in “saboteur, Kamikaze man” uses censurae to insure the power of depression and self destruction is highlighted through the kamikaze suicidal nature which was always apparent to her. From the numerous symbols included in "Cut", Plath successfully conveys her exploration on idealistic views of how social constraint has  a pessimistic effect on women.

The transformation which is evident in everybody’s process of discovery, involved uncovering hidden and known desires. 'Life of Pi' reflects the transformation of a child whose inevitable  responsibility is to grow up, being available through continuous challenges along his journey. The persona from 'Cut' experiences something for the first time which is revealed to have negatively influenced her, making the discovery that traitorous "blood" represents the fickle relationship between herself and husband, a common misconception of the 60's. As both of these texts relate to personal transformation, they also distinguish ideas of graphic symbolism and the need for a chance to live.

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« Reply #748 on: October 10, 2016, 09:09:33 pm »
Hey guys,

I'm not sure how many posts I have or if I qualify for an essay marked. Could you please let me know how many more posts I need to get an essay marked?

I'm leaving my Mod C essay here and I'll be sure to hopefully reach the required posts soon :)
As well as general feedback, if you could outline areas where I go on tangents or that are not very clear or aren't working, please let me know as it is quite long still :)

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A composer’s representation of people and politics is often a criticism of a composer’s contemporary context, reflecting political motivations and acts and their ramifications on individuals and society more broadly. Arthur Miller’s dramatic play The Crucible (1953) explores how competing voices are silenced in 1692 Salem, paralleling his contextual political situation of McCarthyism. Similarly, Lee Daniels’ historical feature film, The Butler (2013) explores competing political perspectives surrounding the American civil rights movement. Dissent in the form of political perspectives that oppose the majority’s view are silenced by the majority which can cause injustice to individuals and broader society. Both composers utilise a variety of dramatic and cinematic techniques in order represent political situations of their own context; commenting on and criticising the impacts of political acts that silence competing political perspectives, whilst positioning audiences to agree with their point of view.

Political events and situations are tumultuous, causing dissent from competing political perspectives that challenge widely accepted beliefs. Miller condemns his contexts’ political situation of McCarthyism which arbitrarily accused and punished perceived communists who threatened the socialist regime. The Theocracy’s reign, using religion as a vehicle to maintain and exercise control, is Miller’s deliberate representation of his political context, allowing him to indirectly criticise the McCarthyist regime. Corruption and materialism that characterise the theocracy, evokes a negative attitude within the audience; evident in Proctor’s hyperbolic criticism of Parris’ demands that he “preach nothin’ but golden candlesticks for 20 weeks until he had them.” Dissension through competing political perspectives threaten the theocracy’s control over Salem, epitomised through Danforth’s metaphor “A person is either with this court or he must be counted against it, there be no road in between.” Miller depicts competing political perspectives that are hidden behind adherence or denial of religious rules, thus making political motivations ambiguous. By representing his own political context, Miller effectively conveys to responders how those in power silence dissenters in order to maintain control. Excessive repetition of questioning and pleading in “What say you, sir? Will you drop this charge? What say you to that?” exemplify the Theocracy’s attempts to silence Proctor’s dissent, revealing their overwhelming desire to maintain control. Thus Miller depicts dissent in Salem as an effective representation of his political situation, conveying to responders how these individual perspectives are unjustly silenced.

Just as Miller represents those in power silencing dissent, Daniels describes the political climate of the American civil rights movement that dissented against the white majority to gain control. A low angle shot combined with the commanding tone of the white Ms Annabelle, as she orders the black slaves, “I don’t even wanna hear you breathe” emphasises the white majority’s supremacist perspective. Scared facial expressions of the black slaves deliberately positions responders to negatively view the white majority’s views. Dissension against this shared perspective is represented through any political perspective that opposes the elitist views of the white majority in 20th century America. President Kennedy’s television address that plays on top of majestic string and brass non-diegetic music, inspires responders with his desire to “enact legislation, giving all Americans the right to be served … in hotels, restaurants and theatres.” Cumulation of facilities emphasises the existing oppression of the minority and like Miller, deliberately positions responders to negatively view those in power. Civil rights activists, represented through the Black Panthers, dissent against black oppression, epitomised through political acts of repeating “I would like to be served” at a white diner. This act of dissent threatens the white majority’s control, highlighted by a panning shot across a room of angered white facial expressions; allowing Daniels’ to convey the need for dissent in an oppressive society. Thus, competing political motivations cause conflict within society, necessitating dissent in order to gain a change in control.

Competing political perspectives may be silenced through political acts that can result in injustice for individuals and broader society. As a representation of his own context, Miller condemns the injustice that results from attempts to silence competing political perspectives. The theological political perspective is described by Hale as “a fortress, no crack in a fortress may be counted small,” exposing the need to silence dissent in order to maintain control. Danforth’s hyperbole and exclamation in “I shall hang ten thousand that dare to rise against the law!” epitomises the extent to which the theocracy will act and cause fear and injustice to society as a whole; in which Miller deliberate manipulates responders to harshly criticise these political acts. Utilisation of the crescendo effect, inherent within each act, effectively ensures audience engagement. Responders consequently have a heightened understanding of Miller’s purpose that condemns injustice that results from silencing dissent, exposed through explanatory notes/stage directions to “show that the sin of public terror is that it divests man of conscience … expose the guilt which the hysteria merely unleashed.” The moral conscience of Salem, revealed through biblical allusions of “saint like Rebecca,” whose death by the theocracy epitomises injustice to individuals that is caused by silencing dissent. Thus Miller’s representation of the Theocracy silencing dissent as a reflection of his own context positions readers to condemn oppressive regimes.

 Whilst Miller deliberately portrays the silencing of competing perspectives as unjust, reflecting his political McCarthyist context, Daniels reflects the American civil rights movement as necessary due to widespread injustice from the white majority silencing dissent. Those that dissent are punished through political acts involving humiliation and violence that strip away individual rights. Forlorn music enhances Kennedy’s report on Louis’ arrest, “He’s pretty beat up. Based on his record he must be used to it. He’s been arrested 16 times.” Cecil’s sombre facial expression and lowered head, highlights the unjust ramifications of political acts on families and broader society, deliberately positioning readers to condemn the oppressive white majority. Acts of violence against the minority create oppression and injustice, evident in the diner where the white majority shout derogatory terms in angry tones at activists, “Get up nigger” and “Does it say coons here?” Rapid transitions between numerous violent acts against the activists, highlights the overwhelming ability of the shared political perspective to silence individuals. Cecil’s voice over “Mrs Kennedy refused to change her clothes so that everybody could see what they did to her husband” as her pristine costuming is symbolically stained with blood, emphasises injustice as a result of the white majority’s political act of Kennedy’s assassination. The effects of political acts on families is evident through her facial expressions of crying and pain in conjunction with melancholy non-diegetic background music. Thus, political acts to silence competing perspectives results in injustice and oppression to those that threaten the shared perspectives control.

Thus representations of people and politics highlight the different political motivations within society. When the shared perspective is threatened, political acts ensue to silence contrasting opinions, resulting in injustice to those that are targeted. Arthur Miller’s The Crucible and Lee Daniel’s The Butler both represent historical events that allow their composer to comment on the political situation at the time.
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« Reply #749 on: October 10, 2016, 09:31:07 pm »
Hey guys,
I'm not sure how many posts I have or if I qualify for an essay marked. Could you please let me know how many more posts I need to get an essay marked?

Hey Isaac! You qualify! We'll get you feedback ASAP! :)