“The process of discovery involves uncovering what is hidden and reconsidering what is known.”How is this perspective on discovery explored in your prescribed text and one related text of your own choosing?Discovery encompasses uncovering what is hidden and reconsidering what is known.
As a thesis statement and as a start to your essay, this isn't going to be impressing a marker, simply because you're just agreeing with the question and not really bringing anything original to the table. So you can imagine that in the HSC with a few thousand students using the same opening line, yours doesn't demand the attention of a marker. Your second sentence is far more like it... An individual can only progress throughout life with determination and willingness to accept discovery, regardless of if it is planned or unexpected.
So this was a great thesis statement, but your first sentence let's you down. When you answer the question, bring something original to the debate as well. Rather than just agreeing, pair it with something that you know to be true based on your texts. This link might help you formulate a thesis statement. It is great that you haven't mentioned the texts yet, you've got a good grasp on the idea of a concept based study. Robert Gray’s poem Journey; the North Coast, The Meatworks, North Coast town and Late Ferry is the prescribed text which reproduces the course of uncovering the unknown as well as reconsidering the known. Francis Scott Fitzgerald’s short story Winter Dreams also explores this perspective of discovery. Both texts interrelate with themes, despite very different personas, and demonstrate that discovery largely depends upon exposing the hidden and reassessing supposed certainties.
Nice!When studying texts, the context behind the author’s writings is being considered
more often. I don't know that this is a true statement. I think this paragraph would be strongest by opening it with a sentence purely about discovery, and then having a kind of sub-argument about the way context can enhance an audience's understanding of discovery. Remember, we can't just talk about the audience's understanding of the text, it has to be about the audience's understanding of DISCOVERY. The process of discovery is made extremely evident during the character’s series of events but to understand the story on a deeper level, the happenings around the author also play an integral role.
Fitzgerald appears to have strong connections with Dexter, the main protagonist of Winter Dreams. After failing twice to publish an early book, and being unsuccessful as a screenwriter, Fitzgerald believed that a successful career as a novelist would gain respect from his loved one and her family. Later in his life, his loved one was institutionalised and his alcoholism grew immensely as his writing intensified with notions of success and romanticism. This social context reflects when Judy asks Dexter “Who are you?” and he replies with “I’m nobody . . . My career is largely a matter of futures.” This reveals his winter dreams of gaining economic acceptance and shows that anything between now and the end point of success is deemed unimportant to him. Although I think this is genuinely really interesting content, it doesn't have a place in a discovery essay like this one. The entire italicised area will not gain you any marks at all, therefore it is words wasted. You're not offering deep analysis in relation to discovery, and that's what we need. Context is a tricky path to follow in AOS - it's far trickier here than in the other modules. The historical context is illustrated by direct address to the audience. F
or example, “He was one of those young thousands who greeted the war with a certain amount of relief, welcoming the liberation from webs of tangled emotion,” depicts the era while effectively portraying its tumultuous effect on society.
Try to avoid "for example" and "the quote shows..." and instead try to embed your quotes wherever possible. This might sound better like, "The author depicts the era while effectively portraying its tumultuous effect on society when he writes, "quote here."Robert Gray’s North Coast Town begins with “Out beside the highway, first thing in the morning”. This refers to popular protest music of the 60s and reflects how Gray was unhappy with the ‘progression’ of the town, largely influenced by America. Both quotes display how discovery involves movement and travelling places to arrive to a new destination. Gray begins his poem by reconsidering his reality while Dexter moves towards uncovering the glory of an efficacious career. These discoveries are both influenced by the authors’ context.
This little bit isn't long enough that I'd suggest splitting it up as the best way to go. I'd actually leave it on the end. And trust me, I did a very similar thing to you here by splitting the paragraphs in my own essay, I totally understand the desire to split them. But, this ending bit is a bit too short to stand on its own, and it actually weakens the link between the two. The willingness to be ideologically receptive of new experiences dictates the significance that discovery will have on an individual. Human perspective and thought process has a greater chance of advancing if people readily adapt to any change or unforeseen event. Journey: The North Coast shows the potential of self-discovery based on reflection of who we were and what we have become. This free verse poem uses literary techniques such as caesura, enjambment and imagery to create a sense that the destination of discovery is less important than the journey of discovery itself.
Listing techniques is usually not the best thing to do, but in this case it could work if you put more work into the "explain" section of this. So, caesura, enjambment and imagery. You've told us that they exist, and that somehow they create discovery as a journey. But, how? How does caesura as a technique create that? I would say caesura is a stylistic technique that emulates the path of discovery...then explain the workings of caesura in the text. Similarly, enjambment allows the text to mirror the journey of discovery through the lack of punctuation, creating a flow on effect in the text that reflects the flow of a discovery journey. This is how we get really deep analysis. “I’ll leave my hair ruffled a bit, stow the books and wash-bag and city clothes.”
This quote Gray shows how the persona is rejecting the constrictions of society and the use of imperative verbs proves how his confidence has been rediscovered. He is showing that he is ready to experience this new journey and any event that comes with it.
Dexter, of Winter Dreams, contradicts this openness due to his often unwavering mindset. Use of high modality helps emphasise his emotions and the devastation of his situation. For example, “Succeeding exhilaration came restlessness and dissatisfaction”, leaves the audience understanding Dexter’s dejection as well as his unwillingness to accept further discovery. However, as the alluring Judy returns again Dexter is more open to new experiences. He reconsiders what is known just as the persona in Journey: The North Coast reaches a moment of clarity after uncovering what is hidden.
The process of discovery involving uncovering what is hidden or rediscovering what is known can bring on intense emotions and reflection upon one’s own actions. Environments that stimulate new experiences lead readers and authors to open their minds and prepare themselves more aptly. During Winter Dreams, Dexter recalls distant memories as he listens to a song. This personal discovery arises from “a mood of intense appreciation, a sense that, for once, he was magnificently attune to life and that everything about him was radiating a brightness and a glamour he might never know again.” It makes him believe that bliss can be found in the world and by falling in love with a girl, it may simply be centimetres away from his grasp.
This is the kind of length you can have stand on its own 
We do need more from discovery here, specifically in relation to the question Robert Gray’s The Meatworks is an
extremely explicit poem and explores the confliction of morals in the workplace through terrifyingly confronting imagery.
About half way Too colloquial. through the poem, the setting changes from the revolting abattoir to “the shiny, white-bruising beach, in mauve light, past the town.” Mauve is the colour associated with bruising and it demonstrates how the sudden loneliness hurts the persona as he feels a rush of guilt and inhumanity, all while he is surrounded by unspoiled nature
This sentence is a perfect opportunity to talk about symbolism . This light clearly displays how he is left tainted, both spiritually and emotionally, after working at the abattoir and leaves the audience questioning their morals and values, inclusive of the ever-lasting confliction of financial or internal benefit. Discovery is a tantalising process and involves uncovering the hidden and reconsidering the known, often bringing about intense emotion or reflection.
Nice!It is not essential that discovery is spectacularly momentous; it can be enduring, inventive or extremely subtle. In different forms of text, discovery can have various impacts on the wide demographic depending on their past experiences and personal context. Late Ferry by Robert Gray is an enthralling poem that allows the audience to evaluate the happenings of certain events even if they aren’t watching. Solitude brings about discovery as people can escape the busyness of everyday life and reconsider their actions. “Ahead, neon redness trembles down in the water, as if into ice, and the longer white lights feel nervously about in the blackness” shows how frightening journey can be and that dangerous waters lie ahead. The connotations of red are
automatically linked with uncertainty and the personification of ‘lights’ extends this thought but also makes the audience consider the need for illumination.
Nice! Nature is powerfully restorative during the poem and allows the persona to question his philosophies.
Similarly, Dexter experiences discovery when “the moon held a finger to her lips and the lake became a clear pool.” This welcoming environment automatically has connotations of optimism and the audience feels at peace with Dexter. This subtle change allows for recapturing of thoughts. Both these ideas are reflected with the simile “his heart turned over like the fly-wheel of the boat . . . her casual whim gave a new direction to his life” and illustrates how the previous elusiveness can transform into a more recognisable discovery. Both texts prove that reconsidering and uncovering during the process of discovery does not need to be overtly obvious.
While the audience may often predict the uncovering of a concealment, there are many times where recognition and discovery is unforeseen. This notion conveyed in many stories is reflective of human life and the unexpectedness of future events. In North Coast Town the use of personification, paradox and alliteration illustrate that discovery is not always blatantly obvious. “At this kerb sand crawls by, and palm fronds here scrape dryly” uses personification to show the agonising process of nature struggling through and being destroyed by greed-filled humans. Gray has written this poem as a reaction to the sensory process of memory. It allows the audience to rationalise the happenings around themselves by reacting objectively rather than subjectively, and this can bring about startling moments of discovery. During Winter Dreams, the audience wonders about the outcome of Dexter and Judy’s relationship after the discoveries of her promiscuous behaviour and his determination towards success. The short story concludes with a statement by Dexter, “I cannot care. That thing will come back to me no more.” His response is rather unexpected, due to his previous infatuation with Judy, as her diminishing beauty seems more to him like death. The prescribed text and Winter Dreams produce unexpected twists with the use of literary techniques that further engage the audience.
I tend to think that "the use of literary techniques" is a bit of a cop-out in conclusive statements. It doesn't really bring anything specific to the mind of the audience, and that's the aim. We want the marker to be quickly connected back to previous ideas to optimise the cohesiveness of your argument. But when we vaguely talk about "techniques" it doesn't make that connection click. Humans evolve through the development of logical reasoning and this is stimulated by discovery. Perceptivity is advanced based on the willingness to adapt to situations readily but also open our minds to intense emotions. To do this, a revelation must occur through the means of viewing an aspect for the first time or re-evaluating a previously accepted standard. This perspective on discovery is explored in the prescribed texts of Robert Grey and F. Scott Fitzgerald’s Winter Dreams through the use of
literary techniques and various elements of discovery. Humans must maintain a high level of adaptability as well as a strong belief in self to allow the process of discovery to continue throughout their lifetime and act as a platform for wondrous transformation.
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