Read my Medea Essay

[cosine]

Can someone read my essay attached please and leave in-detail feedback?

Many thanks.

[Cristiano]

Can someone read my essay attached please and leave in-detail feedback?

Many thanks.

I've attached some feedback on this. It might not be the greatest so bare with me as i've not done this much.

[cosine]

Thanks Cristiano.

Another two in which I would like you to read. Your feedback is really good. Thanks.

[Cristiano]

Attached is the feedback for one of them. Have a read and let me know if you don't understand some of the things i've said.
I'll have a look over the other one in a bit and get it back to you today.

Good work though   

[cosine]

Here is another 2 essays - any feedback is welcomed please keep it coming.

[Cristiano]

Here's one for -13.

[cosine]

I see what you mean with my last two paragraphs, here's what I tried to convey:

Paragraph 2: Medea is repugnant in eyes of the theatrical audience and the characters of the play, including the Nurse, Tutor, Chorus and Jason

Paragraph 3: Because Medea fought a patriarchal society, Euripides seems to support Medea's actions for standing up to men, so in his eyes she is less repugnant than Jason.

Are we allowed to make conclusions like this? Like you know how some people use each paragraph for each character, are you allowed to use the author/director in a single paragraph?

[Cristiano]

I guess I see where you're coming from, though I don't think you can totally decide their views (since we don't know them), if u really wanted to then you could say perhaps he sees it this way. But I feel as the last part doesn't entirely address the prompt czuse ur saying Euripides thinks it's okay to be repugnsnt as long as u can act nice in someway (acting as a heroine), which doesn't really flow.

[cosine]

I guess I see where you're coming from, though I don't think you can totally decide their views (since we don't know them), if u really wanted to then you could say perhaps he sees it this way. But I feel as the last part doesn't entirely address the prompt czuse ur saying Euripides thinks it's okay to be repugnsnt as long as u can act nice in someway (acting as a heroine), which doesn't really flow.

Hmm this is a bit confusing now, then how would you include his perception/views in the essay anyway?
Should I avoid something like this on the exam?

[Cristiano]

No you can definitely include his intentions, but just his intentions. What you've done is fine but just don't be too definitive, you get marks on the way the author "constructs meaning" so you need to interpret how Euripides has specifically constructed Medea and analyse why she isn't / or Is repugnant , and the same with Jason

[cosine]

No you can definitely include his intentions, but just his intentions. What you've done is fine but just don't be too definitive, you get marks on the way the author "constructs meaning" so you need to interpret how Euripides has specifically constructed Medea and analyse why she isn't / or Is repugnant , and the same with Jason

But the fact that you could not pick up on my main arguments for the last paragraph puts me down a little bit - why is it not clear? Is there any specific changes in the main argument you would suggest me changing? What if the examiner does not understand the main argument of the paragraph, how can I avoid this?

[Cristiano]

I think your arguments need to be clear in the introduction. Just plain clear. 1,2,3. These are my 3 arguments and for each argument I'm gonna have a paragraph about each. Each argument then has points to talk about which are all different. It felt like your arguments weren't very clear and had to read over a few times to understand them. Try shortening your sentences and making each topic sentence clear. This will improve clarity and allow assessors to easily pick things up. Have a look at what I said under the intro, maybe that'll help. Don't feel disheartened, just work at it and keep sending it in until it's good

[Cristiano]

Here

[literally lauren]

But the fact that you could not pick up on my main arguments for the last paragraph puts me down a little bit - why is it not clear? Is there any specific changes in the main argument you would suggest me changing? What if the examiner does not understand the main argument of the paragraph, how can I avoid this?

Pro-tip: make your first and last sentences really direct references to the prompt. If the assessor were to read your intro, concl. and those sentences, they should know what your contention is. If not, rewrite them.

In reality, they have to read the whole thing, but keeping that focus on either end of things means they'll have to do less work trying to figure things out