Thanks very much 
Can someone please help me on rewording this topic sentence of my essay more clearly:
The corruption of power through Richard’s endeavour to overthrow the moral dictates of the natural order in the Elizabethan era is redefined by Pacino in a postmodern context.
The question to the essay is this ( in case it helps):
How effectively is the value of humanism and morality revealed to audiences through the composer’s representation of The Vice?
Hi...
Perhaps you could try putting the topic sentence in an active voice? E.g. 'Jerry walked the dog' (active, because the subject of the sentence comes first), as opposed to 'the dog is walked by Jerry'.
(I am notorious for writing in passive voice, so I find it becomes clearer when I switch it around).
E.g. 'Pacino redefines Richard's tyrannous corruption, making the Elizabethan intentions of Shakespeare relevant in a post-modern context.
This way, you can really own what you want to say about how the text is moderated for a modern audience - is it Richard's usurpation? His disregard for morals and conscience?
Remember also too, the question is asking you to make a judgement on how effective the themes are conveyed.
Hope this helps
