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I call on religious communities, religious leaders and people of faith to confront hostility… to reaffirm our common humanity, and to pave the way for greater tolerance and solidarity among all groups… Together, we can realise the enormous potential of religions to foster true peace.
Outline how peace is expressed through the sacred texts of TWO religious traditions and demonstrate how this provides guidance for the attainment of world peace.
Principal teachings by Jesus Christ in the New Testament are imperative to connecting the Christian adherent to an inner peace and demonstrating how their beliefs transcend into attaining world peace. Peace is at the heart of the life and ministry of Jesus Christ as he is the son of God from whom all peace derived and is said to have acted in perfect righteousness and hence is commonly referred to as the ‘Prince of Peace’ (Isaiah 9:6). As Jesus models a life for peace, he is subsequently what adherents strive to emulate. Jesus constantly endeavoured to promote solidarity and foster greater tolerance reflected in ‘For Christ Jesus is our peace, who has made us both one, and has broken down the dividing wall of hostility.’ (Ephesians 2:14) Through his teachings it is evident that peace is a gift from God and it only through God that inner peace is obtained. This is reflected by the director of ‘TEAR Australia’ stating ‘I find my motivation for peacebuilding in the teachings of Jesus.’ This involves teachings such as Jesus’ Golden Rule; ‘Do unto others as you would have them do to you’ (Luke 6:31). Pope Francis similarly reiterates this belief in ‘We must… spread the love. Be poor among the poor. We need to include the excluded and preach peace.’ Thus it is evident in the New Testament that Jesus’ teachings on love, compassion, and acceptance act as a catalyst for solidarity as they have left continuous impacts on individuals today which allows the prosperity of peace to flourish around the world.