Is it possible for me to get feedback for a short answer response to this question:
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Sorry to the people above, I didn't do 2-Unit SOR, hopefully someone can help you out soon and don't know much about that personality either!Feedback is in bold:
Demonstrate the significance of the practice for the individual. (5 marks) The rite of Hajj is a significant personal experience for Muslims for two main reasons.
Good first sentence - Answers the question directly. No time to muck around. Firstly it places adherents in situations which allow and encourage questions of spirituality to be asked. The opportunity to reassess and confirm Islamic beliefs is given to adherents as the individual embarks on a journey of strengthening their spirituality through worship, hardship and Salat.
Good!. As an outward projection of the internal will to be reborn and as a symbol for purification, male pilgrims shave their heads. This complements the waring of the Ihram garments where individuals affirm a common identity before the eyes of God and are united as a single Umma.
Good - Since you are talking about connection to beliefs, do you have any specific beliefs that are being strengthened/considered here? Perhaps Tawhid, Jannah? Thus, participation in Hajj enables the pilgrims spiritual rebirth and renewal through cleansing from sin; “Whoever performs the Hajj…will come home like a newborn”.
Good reference, where's it from? Be sure to give the specific Quran/Hadith reference where possible. The external representation of this is seen in the new status that pilgrims adopt upon their completion of Hajj; females become Hajjah’s and males become Hajji’s. The internal representation of the strengthened and revived adherence to the Islamic faith is confirmed by the enduring desire to continue this relationship with Allah by the pilgrims after they return home. Furthermore, the Hajj focuses individuals on jihad; the personal struggle to follow the way of Allah.
Good. The pilgrim reaffirms their devotion to Allah whilst experiencing a profoundly meaningful renewal of personal commitment to the Islamic faith. The practise of retracing the footsteps of Abraham, Muhammad, Ishmael, cursing Satan, giving Zakaat and praying for forgiveness compels the individual to gain a greater understanding of Islamic history and better prospects for reward in the afterlife.
Good - This would be a good chance to link to the Islamic belief in the Prophets? Talbiyah is the public statement of submission to the will of Allah; “Here I am God at thy command”. It is expressed during Tawaf, and is significant in allowing the individual to experience spiritual rebirth and develop their sense of consciousness in God.
I'd like to see a conclusion - Thus, it is clear how Hajj proves to be a significant practice for Muslims. Or similar?I think this is a great response! Definitely at least four marks, and probably five - The reason I say probably isn't because of what is there, but because I don't think you'd be able to reproduce something of this length for a 5 marker in an exam! This is just over 300 words - I'd maybe expect this for a 7 marker (at a stretch), but a little much for a 5'er. You'll have to go through and condense everything down, focus on the sentences where you make direct references to aspects of Hajj rather than broader sweeping statements. Referencing specific beliefs of Islam could help you make your analysis more powerful.
That said, definitely high quality response - Well done

I'll get to your other one soon!