To what extent do the texts you have studied reveal both the emotional and intellectual responses provoked by the experience of discovering? In your response, refer to your prescribed text and ONE other related
Discovery is a universal experience that is part of the human condition.
I'd get your teacher's opinion on this. In my opinion, leaving it as the human condition is broad and not unique and will feature in many essays. If you narrow it down to, perhaps, "the empathetic part of the human condition"
for example then you start to go down an interesting road that will separate you from the rest. Thus, the experience of a meaningful discovery or rediscovery may evoke emotional and intellectual responses that can affirm and challenge an individual's world.
nice! Ang Lee’s film “Life of Pi” encompasses Pi’s range of discoveries whilst on the Pacific Ocean, which has forced him to go beyond his comfort zone by challenging his religious morals. This leads to Pi’s new understanding of the balance of the physical and metaphysical worlds. Counteractively, the rediscovery of childhood in D.H Lawrence’s poem “Piano”, provides a platform for the persona to discover his saudade, thus reminding him of the tragedies and hardships of adulthood. Hence, the experience of discovery and the emotional and intellectual responses can enable one to gain new perceptions and understandings of the world.
Great! Excellent work 
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An individual’s emotional response to the experience of discovery is
due to the transgression of their values, that embodies new behaviours that is uncommon of an individual.
There are a few "stop words" here that make me stop, look back, and realise there's something jarring. So, "due to" is first,
then "that embodies" and then "that is." "An individual's emotional response to discoveries is prompted by the transgression of their values, thus embodying new behaviours otherwise seen as uncommon for the individual." This still isn't perfect but it avoids the "that" we would use in colloquial language and allows it to flow better. “Life of Pi” explores this through a range of Pi’s discoveries that has challenged his religious morals. Whilst Pi is on his journey in the harsh and desolate ocean environment, he is forced to kill a fish for survival, which Pi considers to be immoral and cruel. In this scene, a close up shot of the colour shift from vibrant to dull, parallels with Pi’s emotional response as he cries out “I’m sorry!”, portraying his discovery of his immoral actions that evokes his guilt and shame. Furthermore, Pi boldly screams to Richard Parker, “MINE!MINE!” to the sudden discovery of flying fishes that lands within his boat, which demonstrates his power over animal instincts.
This last piece of analysis is confusing to me, I'm not making a connection between the plot, technique, and effect here? Thus, Lee alludes to Pi as the God of Yogis, Shiva, that symbolises the destruction of morals and values and the creation of new physicalities, illustrating how the discovery of meat has lead him to disregard his humility to the natural world in order to survive. Moreover, the medium shot and diegetic sounds of Pi devouring the fish elaborates on the dismissal of his vegetarian diet to survive. This in effect, elucidates Pi’s desperation and greed as a repeated response to the discovery of food and water. Thus, this showcases how the intensity of our guilt and shame from subverting our morals, diminishes as we experience the same discovery several times.
Second time using "thus" in this paragraph - I'd change it up Similarly, this is seen in Pi’s discoveries which has forced him beyond his psyche that catalysed his extreme greed and desperation to survive.
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Moreover,
You've also used moreover a few sentences ago surprising discoveries can trigger intellectual responses that introduce new ideas that result in a better understanding of the world. This is seen as Pi demonstrates a renewal to his understanding of the physical and metaphysical worlds. Pi’s dream encompasses the slow camera zoom into his eyes which employs a vignette of the zoo animals, Pi’s mother, the Mouth of Krishna and Tsimtsum. This becomes a synecdoche to Pi’s dynamic experiences as they are conflicting, comforting and educating. Hence, Lee asserts Pi’s ability to construct these complex memories, as suggestive of renewed understanding for humility and survival instincts as a platform to maintain his sanity.This is further highlighted by the paradoxical voiceover, “If I hadn’t found that island, I would’ve died. If I didn’t discover the tooth. I would’ve died”, which highlights the symbolic nature of the carnivorous island as Pi’s relinquishment and the tooth as his connection to the physical reality. Thus, both discoveries illustrates Pi’s renewed perception for the necessity of both, which saves him from death. As a result, an individual’s willingness to embrace their intellectual responses from their discoveries increases their knowledge about the world, such as Pi’s new and renewed perception of the physical and metaphysical worlds.
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The process of rediscovery in “Piano” also evokes emotional responses, not by a transgression of their values, but of the societal widely-held assumptions of gender behaviours.
Neat! The persona’s catalyst to his rediscovery was a singer who reminded him of his mother’s piano which caused his saudade of his childhood as his, “heart weep to belong/ to the old Sunday evenings at home”. The persona’s reference to the “old Sunday” evening coupled with the conventional rhyme scheme of AABB symbolises the strong conformist society of the 19th century, which made it challenging for men to openly express their emotions. However, the word choice of “weep” develops the persona’s sentimental tone that denotes to the power of rediscovery as it forces the persona beyond his limitations of emotional expression. The composer’s use of the three stanza structure, is metaphorical for the responder’s venture into the rediscovery of the persona’s memories and a discovery of his extreme sadness. Thus, it becomes a platform to convey how such intimate and fragile moments of reflection are able expound an individual’s insecurities that expels their façade of conformity. Further to this, the last stanza encompasses the persona’s dismay to be drawn as, “it is vain for the singer to burst into clamour/ great black appassionato”. The word choice of “clamour” and “appassionato”, a musical term for strong passion, evokes an auditory image of the persona’s desperate plea to relive his childhood. Additionally, it encompasses the outrage of intense and mixed emotions of distraught, despair and desperation which serves to reveal the emotional insanity towards his undesired discovery. Thus, Lawrence’s “Piano” reveals the persona’s rediscovery of his childhood as a gradual process that inevitably evokes his strong emotional responses that surpass his social standards.
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Concurrently, the persona explores an intellectual response as he embraces the experience of rediscovery that reminds him of the cruelty of adulthood. The last stanza acts as a parallel to a coda in music, and thus it becomes a metaphor for the persona’s intellectual response as he asserts that, “of childish days is upon [him], [his] manhood is cast”. The line employs the accents of the disyllabic words of “childish” and “manhood” that juxtaposes the innocence of childhood to the hardships of adulthood. Hence, it proves the persona’s full understanding for the differences between both stages. Moreover, the persona, “weep like a child for the past” which proffers a double meaning that is enforced by the simile. On a literal level, it compares the persona to a child’s cry which expresses his fragility.
Great! This denotes to the persona’s distraught and frustration, as he is unable to relive his childhood due to the passing of time. Whilst symbolically, the literary form and poetic structure, communicates his realisation of the social incorrectness for men to cry, hence the line posits the dual perspectives that proves his resentment to the 19th century social framework.
I think this is something you could tap into more - it's only just brushed over. Could you carry the idea of social frameworks through the entire essay? That would really take it to the next level. But if you just want to leave it here, I think it needs more of a harsh introduction at the beginning of this paragraph. Consequently, the persona’s embrace of his rediscovery has evoked his intellectual response as broadening towards his understanding of the hardships of adulthood.
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In essence, the universal experience of discovery and rediscovery expounds the emotional and intellectual responses. The intensity of an individual’s embracement of their discovery, determines the extent of their affirmation and/or challenge to their preconceived understanding and perceptions. “Life of Pi” explores Pi’s emotional dynamics upon the discovery for the necessity to survive and thus, gains an understanding for the balance of the physical and metaphysical worlds. Whilst, “Piano”encompasses the persona’s rediscovery of his childhood that evokes the sentimentality, which allows him to gain insight to the suffering of adulthood. Thus from both the discoveries’ emotional and intellectual responses, it provides a platform for a new or renewed understanding of the self and others.
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