Thank you Elyse!! Gosh I appreciate all you guys so much for helping us out !! I could cry tears of joy to be honest (: Regarding the ideas from the rubric, the 2016 question was: To what extent do the texts you have studied reveal both the emotional and intellectual responses provoked by the experience of discovering? So I just pulled out the section of the rubric that was already in the question! (:
Should I also be adding another section from the rubric into my essay to expand upon the question, or would what the question provided be good enough? Thank you so much again!
I've read what you've said a few times over because I'm really happy, it's so sweet
I figured you'd taken that from 2016. So, if that was the question: you'd need more discovery, I suggest! Just so you can discuss different angles...and more stages of discovery than just the outcomes! But, if this is not your essay question, then you're already combining emotional and intellectual with whatever else they ask from you...if that makes sense? So you'll already be prepared
Hey!!
Just wondering if this thesis statement makes sense in answer to the question:
"at the heart of representation are acts of deliberate selection and emphasis"
thesis- the intentional choice of particular events and the significant form in which they are stressed, are ultimately political actions that constitute the core of representation. It is evidently the manner in which a situation is represented that determines the impact on individuals and it's significance on the broader society.
thx for your help! sorry just realised this was AOS and i'm talking about mod c (people and politics) is there somewhere else I can get mod c thesis statements checked??
Totally fine for you to put this here!
The ideas in your statement here are perfect - very clear and sophisticated. but, by the end of your first sentence I'm struggling to grasp everything. I noticed I was slowly down my reading and really focusing on each word because as much as I wanted to grasp it all, there's a lot. It's a bit wordy, but also the defining "core of representation" sits at the very end, which is one of the most important things you say, but I'm a bit lost by the time I get to it. You might need to work on culling some words or re-arranging the sentence a bit!