How is the necessity for change shown in both texts?"
Since this a comparative essay, maybe start the essay by introducing both texts, then diverging into each one. eg. In Ransom and Invictus (very basic, sorry couldn't think of anything on the spot)In a revisit to Homer’s The Iliad, David Malouf’s Ransom explores the importance of change in a society overwhelmed by hardship during the Trojan war what's wrong with facing hardship, I mean why is change necessary? . Suffering through decades of violence and tragedy, the city of Troy has hit a crisis and it is only through change that characters are able to rise above their pasts rise above their pasts and go where? You need to prove to the audience that change will lead individuals in a better direction . Through his novel, Malouf also reveals that identifying the need for a new approach is fundamental in creating active leaders and individuals who are open to empathy and forgiveness nice, but make it more sophisticated you can try linking the 'empathy and forgiveness' to the new approach, rather than two separate subjects.. Malouf identifies forgiveness and empathy as a fundamental humane approach... for active leaders to overcome... In Clint Eastwood’s film, Invictus, a similar notion of change is evident; through the character of President Nelson Mandela, it is obvious that change is necessary to facilitate efficient leadership and to allow characters to overcome the adversities of their pasts. However, unlike in Malouf’s novel, the unorthodox concept of forgiveness is shown to render unity between a whole nation rather than just two former enemies. good you contrasted, but go a little deeper in the 'two former enemies' this appeals the enemies on a humane, individual, ordinary level
I think in your introduction you did well in highlighting the concepts, but maybe to further enhance it maybe give a little background info on both texts, eg. for Invictus mention it was set in South Africa, for Ransom mention its about King Priam and Achilles
Change is crucial in order to overcome oppressed and war-torn pasts. Prior to Mandela’s inauguration, South Africa was a country ruled by apartheid, with people resistant to change change to what? the removal of the apartheid laws? and indifferent to segregation (wrong word) . In his film Invictus, Eastwood initially introduces the black minority of South Africa as people isolated from society, living on the other side of what is both a both literal and metaphorical fence, emphasising the wider social divisions that exist in a country experiencing civil unrest. Mandela, the first elected black president, is the change that his ‘family of 43 million’ had voted for; prior to his appointment, society had neglected why would they act against it? was their an opportunity to change before? If there was... STATE it, if not, then I'm a little confused. to act against their entrenched racist views nice and as a result, South Africa began to struggle. By inspiring his people ‘to be better than they [thought] they [could] be’, Mandela was able to lead his nation out of the apartheid era and into a new ‘future’ unlike anything seen before; a ‘rainbow nation’ that would’ve been impossible without something new 1. Read the last few paragraghs again... you literally retold me the whole movie. The question is HOW is the importance of change shown? Your 'fence' evidence was good. But after that you're retelling. How did he inspire people to do better? How do you know country is in civil unrest? montages from the film? How did he lead his nation to become the rainbow nation? what symbols were used? springboks?. Similarly, although Malouf’s Ransom depicts Troy to be a town at war with Greece rather than battling an internal social divide, it’s clear that traditions of the past have encouraged violent war and murder really?. Through the character of Achilles, Malouf presents a man who, while grieving for his ‘soulmate’, initially follows ‘established’ means of doing so, but eventually comes to the realisation that his ‘buried rage’ is a result of his resistance to change nice, but I'm a little confused at how it links to previous sentence. Achilles, like the people of South Africa in Eastwood’s film, comes to the realisation that continuing to act in the same way during times of conflict “is never enough”; to truly move beyond events of the past, change is required c'mon, this paragrapg had some juicy potential. with Achilles, you can describe the 'clogging grey web' imagery and his dual self.
In the vastly different contexts of Ransom and Invictus, change is shown to be essential in order to be a successful leader and inspire others very neat. During the Trojan War, a very ‘established’ and ‘conventional’ way of life existed, especially for those of high status. Initially no more than ‘the fountainhead of all that [kept] Troy civil and just’, Priam struggled to lead his people as he was restricted from speaking for himself and physically acting due to social barriers and what the rest of society was used to. By going against popular opinion and journeying to meet Achilles ‘as any many might do’, Priam changed the role that a ‘traditional’ king played from a ‘ceremonial figurehead’ to an active and self-efficient leader I'm a little confused. Priam changes his image, fine. But after changing his image, how does his efficiency to lead change? maybe discuss this . While Malouf shows the importance of changing one’s own identity in order to effectively lead, Eastwood focuses on the need to alter an entire nation’s way of thinking why alter?. Mandela, a man who always embraces ‘great opportunities’, uses the Springbok Rugby Team as a symbol to lead his nation to its eventual unification. It is through Pienaar that Mandela promotes his message that ‘in order to build our nation, we must all exceed our own expectations’, and it is this same concept that Pienaar reinforces to his teammates; ‘times change and we need to change as well’ nice pick up, but what does this mean... two leaders using same tactic, go a little further. After the Springboks’ final win, the success of Pienaar and Mandela’s leadership is evident as triumphant music accompanies a panning camera, displaying various groups rejoicing in unity, including a previously resistant Zindzi Mandela well done, nice pick up. This atmosphere represents the changed views of a whole nation affected by Mandela and Pienaar’s leadership. When viewed in comparison with Ransom, unlike Priam, the success of leaders in Invictus is shown to be a result of their ability to inspire others, rather than their ability to be inspired themselves nice ending.
Umm overall you did pretty good, you have some juicy analysis here and there, but sometimes try to be precise with the statements you bring up. eg, Change is necessary. for what? change is necessary to remove the heavy burden of grief. ya dig?
In terms of mark, I have no idea how VCE assessors mark, so I'll just go with what my teacher would give 6.5- 7ish (I really don't know its that's harsh or now, I just know my teacher's standard
keep writing champ!
happy essay writing
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