would love some feedback on the NEAP 2017 exam section C regarding Vice Chancellor at Cara College. it was done with the school under exam conditions
be harsh!
Cara College welcomes the ‘potential students’ to their college and university by the Vice Chancellor’s speech giving them an insight to the atmosphere and values of the school which holds their potential future. Yet, the vice Chancellor uses this as an opportunity to raise a prominent issue of freedom of speech and the groups which are categorise and or labelled within society, and seeks to link this to the audience of potential graduates sitting in front of him by demonstrating and implying that their college have ensured a fat greater degree of ‘social and civil cohesiveness’. Using a formal register to promote his ‘elite’ position and gain respect for his speech (and position), the speaker connects with his audience, by directly addressing them in statements, questions and holding or presenting them in a future with this major regional university. Whilst there are elements of professionalism, the language choices are not too sophisticated or complex, allowing the audience to be persuaded in understanding the points which the speak presents, regarding the segregation and ostracization in society and their attempt to maintain a happy constructive atmosphere.
The speaker begins by contextualising the speech and ‘welcoming’ the (audience) to the college. Suing three brief sentences to sum up the advantages, using positive connotations to the words ‘special’ ‘welcoming’ and ‘safe’ the speech creates a platform for the listener to be enthused and hold in high esteem the college and its values being an ‘inclusive’ – yet another positive word – ‘community’. The opening slide of the speaker’s presentation also gives a visual communication to the audience backing the positivity and enthusiasm of the spoken words. The silhouettes are happy, inclusive and can be seen by the different shapes, styles of hair and heights the diversity which the university brings together to form are happy and (part of) a friendly environment. Further he quotes and the famous world-renowned leader ‘Martin Luther King, Jr’ acts as a reinforcement and or endorsement to the ideas of freedom, livery and inclusiveness, ultimately causing the audience to have respect and open ears foot the issue and argument in which the vice chancellor presents to them in his or her speech. Yet, the speaker quickly moves on from this using this brief introduction, welcome and slide to contextualise and create a platform for the young adults to be influenced and respected by their later arguments.
It is the bulk of the speech where the Vice Chancellor focusses on the broader and wider issue of the ‘political correctness’ and its labelling of ‘one of the elites’ against ‘the disadvantaged’. He or she seeks to eliminate and doubts within anyone of the audiences’ mind when saying ‘there is not question’ position them to immediately be persuades into the statement which is presented as only one sided and without any falter or hesitation in which the statement, ‘that there is a fine line between freedom of speech and political correctness’, is absolutely correct. It is from here where the vice chancellor furthers his stance in acknowledging – in an attempt to be fair and level headed- a counter argument for people to debate social, politics and cultural issues. Similarly, he or she goes onto quote a senior politician and his acceptance of ‘entrenched intolerance’ which is counteracted and interrogated by the question following, upmost mocking in presenting and sound arguments against the politicians and his ‘elitist’ views. Further, the vice chancellor uses this as an opportunity to present his or her own values to have a ‘favour of our responsibility to be decent human beings’, and therefore gaining respect from the audience due to his approach on treating every individual equally irrespective of their education and or differences. Moving on the speaker seeks to define ‘free speech’ – and is saying ‘or should not mean’ acknowledges his awareness to the issues of society and that is does happen- by listing negatively weighted, degrading verbs ‘insult, deride or undermine’. The speaker further lists the groups of which individuals may be compartmentalised into ‘family, nationality, gender race or realisation’ to clearly communicate during his speech to the audience his definition of freedom of speech and the importance it holds.
In the culmination of the arguments the Vice Chancellor seeks to individually address every individual in the crowd and place an appeal to responsibility and urgency to help influence and help prevent their ‘wedges’ in society, and thus ultimately implying this is the college or university for students to strive to closing the gaps in society. the speech becomes more heated as emphasis could be seen by the capitalisation of the letter and including the audience to feel responsible for the divides within society. the speaker seeks to demonstrate to the audience that it is those themselves who are ‘elitists’ which cause groups within society. he seeks to appeal to the students and their potential future, and the opportunities and choices in which they take. In the last two paragraphs the last sentences are direct to each individual to appeal them to help the Cara College to make the difference and ensure a ‘social and civil cohesiveness’. In closing, the speaker leaves with a direct sentence eliminating doubts and finishing on a note of positivity, ‘I am confident you all know the difference’.
The vice Chancellor sees the opening speech to potential students as an opportunity to address the issue within the wider community to highlight the strengths, values and focuses of Cara College. It is with that of professionalism and authority the speaker appeals to the audience to feel the responsibility in making the world a more cohesive place. In expressing the issues of division within society, the speaker seeks to highlight the inclusive nature and atmosphere of the college, positioning the audience to hold the university in high esteem.
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