please mark - medea creative response

[oesho]

hi all, would anyone be able to correct the draft ive got written up for a medea creative sac that I have coming up (constructive criticism is appreciated and a mark out of 10 would be good as well). I've also gone ahead and written like 20 words over the maximum word limit so if you're able to choose which parts of my draft can be erased without affecting the story that would be great as well.

I've had an english lecturer read it prior to posting this, just wanted a third persons opinion on my attempt at an alternate point of view that is medeas heart.

[MissSmiley]

hi all, would anyone be able to correct the draft ive got written up for a medea creative sac that i have coming up (constructive criticism is appreciated and a mark out of 10 would be good as well). I've also gone ahead and written like 20 words over the maximum word limit so if you're able to choose which parts of my draft can be erased without affecting the story that would be great as well.

I've had a english lecturer read it prior to posting this, just wanted a third persons opinion on my attempt at an alternate point of view that is medeas heart.

Hello oesho!

Wow! Creative response for Medea!!?? I've never heard of a creative SAC for Medea! All I've heard and our school does a text response!

But I loved reading your work, and I've attached your document again with my comments.

Overall, good job! And well done for being so organised!

Does your school get you to do a statement of intention as well for this creative piece? (just out of curiousity)!

[clarke54321]

Hello!

In addition to the feedback of MissSmiley, I've attached a marked document of your work.

On the whole, I was extremely impressed by your writing sensitivity (eg. acknowledging that you are constructing a play, inclusion of Greek convention/metalanguage, etc). Further, your use of animate description resonates very nicely with that of Euripides. However, at times, I'd suggest that you work to simplify this description, so as to reduce ambiguity. Perhaps then, the reader will have a better idea about who is narrating.

Hopefully this helps

[oesho]

Hello oesho!

Wow! Creative response for Medea!!?? I've never heard of a creative SAC for Medea! All I've heard and our school does a text response!

But I loved reading your work, and I've attached your document again with my comments in this document.

Overall, good job! And well done for being so organised!

Does your school get you to do a statement of intention as well for this creative piece? (just out of curiousity)!

Yes, im still yet to write my statement of intention for this piece. Really glad you enjoyed reading and thanks so much for the correction!!

[oesho]

Hello!

In addition to the feedback of MissSmiley, I've attached a marked document of your work.

On the whole, I was extremely impressed by your writing sensitivity (eg. acknowledging that you are constructing a play, inclusion of Greek convention/metalanguage, etc). Further, your use of animate description resonates very nicely with that of Euripides. However, at times, I'd suggest that you work to simplify this description, so as to reduce ambiguity. Perhaps then, the reader will have a better idea about who is narrating.

Hopefully this helps

Thanks so much, it really means a lot as English isn't my strongest subject. Glad you enjoyed reading it