Module B - Hamlet Feedback Please

[adelinebrae]

Hi,
I have struggled quite a bit with Hamlet and am still unsure if I am on the right track.
Would someone please be able to give me some feedback?
Thank you so much!

[stationery]

Hey!
I just have some quick advice... hopefully it can help you in some way!

Introduction:
Very well pointed out tension between different religious ideologies, just make sure to expand/ define what they are... remember the markers do not know ANYTHING about Hamlet! Therefore, we must spell out what we mean at all times! Also, do not forget to introduce the text as Shakespeare's Hamlet and do not forget to put in the very first line a thesis! By this I mean a direct link to the question by using the words of the question + your opinion of how Shakespeare explores the question at hand. 

For example (this is a supperrrr rough one that is aiming to incoperate your ideas):  An inherent tension between an individual confronting their fate, along with their own moral standing, signifies the need for us to find truth in order to resolve conflict.

Again, super rough, but hopefully you get the idea I am trying to portray...

With the body paragraphs, I would suggest a more broad opening sentence that links to your thesis (like my example above) and the question, before delving into your analysis. 

In regards to critics, explain what they mean in more detail.  For example, John Citzen similarly paints Hamlet to be an intellectual character, who tries to confront the truth about his father's death and.... etc

Overall, I think it is a strong start! Good luch for the 19th!!

[adelinebrae]

Thank you so much!!! I really appretiate the feedback.