Keyed In Language Analysis Piece =D =D

[HERculina]

WOW your writing is really good
is it just me but you mgs people structure your essays similarly... (i've been trying to copy but semi-failing haha)
must have good teachers there!

[kyzoo]

WOW your writing is really good
is it just me but you mgs people structure your essays similarly... (i've been trying to copy but semi-failing haha)
must have good teachers there!

Structure goes something likes this

Intro
1. Establish the underlying issue, as well as the two opposing sides
2. Author + Publication Details + Contention + Intended Audience + Tone
3. Acknowledge image (if and only if it is significant enough, which it wasn't here)
4. Mention wider implication of topic (Didn't do it here since I already covered it in the first sentnece)

Body
~ Just do it chronologically, starting from the title. Make paragraph breaks whenever you feel your paragraph is getting too big. Focus on specific words and phrases and make up random spastic bs about the probable effect, just whatever comes to mind.

Conclusion
~ Summarize persuasive techniques
~ Summarize effects on different audiences
~ Finish with comment on the future scope of the issue

[EvangelionZeta]

I'd actually dock a mark or two because you don't really touch the image - it's actually quite necessary to actually analyse it properly, even if it's as bare-bones as the Voxi one...

[kyzoo]

I'd actually dock a mark or two because you don't really touch the image - it's actually quite necessary to actually analyse it properly, even if it's as bare-bones as the Voxi one...

3 sentences on it isn't enough?

[HERculina]

The crux of Voxi’s piece comes from her passionate appeals ot the reader’s desire for a luminous future, and his continual attempts to link the digital revolution with the notion of “enhancing our lives.” Younger readers who have become accustomed to digital technology are likely to wholeheartedly side with Voxi’s view that we only stand to reap fantastic benefits from the digital revolution. Conversely older members of the audience whom Voxi has slyly denigrated through subtle pejoratives will probably feel alienated by Voxi’s piece, and thereby bolster their resistance against the digital revolution. All in all, this issue is set to spark further debate as digital technology becomes a more prominent facet of our lives.[/i]

you didnt summarize persuasive techniques in your conclusion...or is this one of those blend-it-in things?

[EvangelionZeta]

I'd actually dock a mark or two because you don't really touch the image - it's actually quite necessary to actually analyse it properly, even if it's as bare-bones as the Voxi one...

3 sentences on it isn't enough?

I found two in paragraph four - where's the third?

Ok, maybe two marks would be excessive, but I can see someone giving this a 9 instead of a 10 as a result of image deficiency (LOL?).

[kyzoo]

I'd actually dock a mark or two because you don't really touch the image - it's actually quite necessary to actually analyse it properly, even if it's as bare-bones as the Voxi one...

3 sentences on it isn't enough?

I found two in paragraph four - where's the third?

Ok, maybe two marks would be excessive, but I can see someone giving this a 9 instead of a 10 as a result of image deficiency (LOL?).

=X ok then, would 4 sentences be sufficient? >.<

[Blakhitman]

make up random spastic bs about the probable effect, just whatever comes to mind.

hahaha so true.

[EvangelionZeta]

I'd actually dock a mark or two because you don't really touch the image - it's actually quite necessary to actually analyse it properly, even if it's as bare-bones as the Voxi one...

3 sentences on it isn't enough?

I found two in paragraph four - where's the third?

Ok, maybe two marks would be excessive, but I can see someone giving this a 9 instead of a 10 as a result of image deficiency (LOL?).

=X ok then, would 4 sentences be sufficient? >.<

I prefer at least a paragraph, so 4 sentences=ok.

[Aden]

=X ok then, would 4 sentences be sufficient? >.<

Hmmm, I spend two whole paragraphs on the image, with one on the analysis of it and the other on its correlation to the article... Not sure if EZ does this as well though

[kyzoo]

=X ok then, would 4 sentences be sufficient? >.<

Hmmm, I spend two whole paragraphs on the image, with one on the analysis of it and the other on its correlation to the article... Not sure if EZ does this as well though

0.o HOW DO YOU SPEND 2 PARAGRAPHS ON THE IMAGE, MY BS GENERATOR RUNS OUT AFTER 2 SENTENCES =.= What else am I meant to say about the image =X "The black background is intended to suggest that without the digital revolution, characterized as it is by the luminous hologram, the human race would be encased within the darkness of wasted human potential."...I can think of nothing more to say =(

I HATE THE VISUAL LOL

[Kotza]

=X ok then, would 4 sentences be sufficient? >.<

Hmmm, I spend two whole paragraphs on the image, with one on the analysis of it and the other on its correlation to the article... Not sure if EZ does this as well though

wouldnt that be wrong though? If you are simply analyzing the image in a WHOLE paragraph without stating its effects but merely its contents, you are ignoring the whole "effect on the reader," which is what lang. analysis is all about....

wouldnt it be easier to state one point the  image raises or signifies and expand upon this in regards to its effects on the reader, and then continue until you have one para.

[EvangelionZeta]

=X ok then, would 4 sentences be sufficient? >.<

Hmmm, I spend two whole paragraphs on the image, with one on the analysis of it and the other on its correlation to the article... Not sure if EZ does this as well though

wouldnt that be wrong though? If you are simply analyzing the image in a WHOLE paragraph without stating its effects but merely its contents, you are ignoring the whole "effect on the reader," which is what lang. analysis is all about....

wouldnt it be easier to state one point the  image raises or signifies and expand upon this in regards to its effects on the reader, and then continue until you have one para.

He means analysing its contents in regards to how it effects the viewer by itself, and then a second paragraph comparing it to the article and discussing the combined effects.  I do the same thing.

[kyzoo]

o actually...now I have an idea for how to make up a whole paragraph about the image. Just combine standalone effects of the image with comment about how the image supplements particular concepts that the writer talks about. In this way you can work your way through the article within the image pararaph without having to be stuck on the image for an entire paragraph =D

[Kotza]

ahh i see... i probably wouldnt have time for that, so i would merely weave it into the same paragraph.