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Re: Mark my Analysis of Language Please
« Reply #15 on: October 14, 2008, 08:27:43 pm »
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I would give the top analysis about a 5.

Its too short as everyone else has stated, and there is to much general statements, use more specfics in your piece, rathen then "makes the reader think..." use more formal langauge. There are a few sentence/structural issues too.

Keep working, you'll get there :)
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