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Mark my Encountering Conflict essay please
« on: September 25, 2009, 07:48:58 pm »
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 “Conflict can reveal unexpected qualities in an individual.”

In the realms of conflict, unexpected qualities may rise within an individual. Conflict is the true test of this, and is the true compass by which heroes are measured and judged. One person’s hero might be another person’s villain. Some may act in an extraordinary way to save one’s life even if it leads to their own demise. Conflict often reveals people’s true personalities and qualities. Conflict has been around ever since the start of human kind. It isn’t something that has developed over time, but something that exists in human nature. People respond to conflict they encounter in many different ways, in some scenarios it may reveal hidden qualities in an individual. Their characteristics determine the nature of their response. This causes them to look deep within themselves and question their own qualities, moral fibers and spiritual beliefs.

Times of conflict do change people’s characters; an ordinary person one day can be compelled to act in an unexpected way to save one’s life. Similarly, we witness characters transformed into different beings when investigating Arthur Miller’s The Crucible. It explores how people in a small puritan town in 1692 are driven and divided by conflicts. When witchcraft is declared in Salem, the reactions of the members of this strictly Puritan society differ greatly. Some see the events that take place as a chance for opportunity, a way to garner personal support, an opportunity to play out personal vengeance and also an occasion to show one’s ability and knowledge. Abigail lied fearing the repercussions of the girls’ activities in the woods, or perhaps she lied to extract vengeance on Proctor and his wife. Her extraordinary accusations of witchcraft also made her the centre of attention; a position upon which she may have thrived. Salem’s ruling theocracy forces citizens to deny their consciences and perjure themselves in order to save their own lives. The majority complies, but a few resist. Proctor encountered conflict with the court as his wife was going to be hanged, his actions to choose death over living without pride, which was seen as unexpected by many, led to his own demise.  Proctor showed how the heat of a crucible can transform a person. It took extraordinary courage to stand up for the truth when lies were associated with patriotism, loyalty and religious fever.

The Crucible brings out the best and the worst in people. False accusations, the furious attacks on innocent friends and neighbours such as Martha Corey and Rebecca Nurse and their hangings, display the worst type of human actions. Where people are not only accused but victimized and tortured. In contrast, the characters of Hale, Rebecca, Giles Corey and John Proctor show the best in human nature. They strive and fight for what is right. Arthur Miller stated that the play is still warning audiences today of what blind panic can do to people. He believed that Salem Interrogations turn out to be merely exact models of Stalin’s Russia, Pinochet’s Chile, Mao’s china and other regimes. The play is not meant to desensitize its audience but to teach to audience how to examine and respond to it ensuring that such unexpected events happen again.


When power and control over others is attained, most would enjoy and prolong this position of authority and some seek to manipulate it. One of the reasons for Arthur Miller writing this play was to challenge the authorities of this time. In the 1950s, Miller experienced conflict with the government led by Senator Joseph McCarthy whose aim was to purge the US of all communists. As McCarthy’s power increased, he gained more control over people and made more demands of them. A parallel can be seen in some of our modern leaders who have abused their power, such as Saddam Hussein and Robert Mugabe. Perhaps some western leaders persecuted and labeled Muslims and wrongly imprisoned terrorist suspects. Characters in The Crucible show that unexpected qualities arise when people are given too much power; Judge Danforth refuses to accept the truth and as a result causes more conflict. His dogmatism and true qualities are revealed when he states ‘confess or you will hang’.

The theme of conflict is explored well in the novel The Kite Runner, as a child Amir was labeled as ‘A boy won’t stand up for himself’ by his father. Therefore throughout his whole child he sought approval of his father, Baba. It is evident that he was partially correct about Amir, as he let Hassan get raped where he could have intervened and stopped the assault. As a result of this he started having nightmares throughout his childhood. Some say Baba’s death freed Amir; he no longer had the necessity to seek approval of his father, which allowed him to move on with his life. His true qualities were revealed when he decided to go back to Afghanistan so save Sohrab, despite his father’s words. One might say Amir’s actions were unexpected as he spent majority of his childhood in fear and was incompetent to stand up for himself let alone placing his life in danger for Sohrab.

In conclusion, we truly see aspects of human qualities being revealed in the when faced with conflict. It causes individuals to open up, revealing their true qualities which bring out the best or the worst in them. The Crucible is an excellent illustration of how unexpected qualities rise within an individual when faced with conflict, some desire to lie and save their own life whilst others such as John Proctor try to fight for justice to an extent which leads to their own demise. The Kite Runner illustrates that people can transform for the greater good in the presence of conflict, revealing their hidden qualities in search of redemption.


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Re: Mark my Encountering Conflict essay please
« Reply #1 on: September 25, 2009, 10:21:20 pm »
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Firstly, I'll admit expository essays are not my strength.

The first thing I notice is that this a more like a text response, which ends up in a very low mark for you. You go into too much detail about 'The Crucible', rather than having outside references. Also, you go into a history of the crucible, which is not desirable at all. The links you do have in there, eg/ Saddam & Mugabe are a bit clumbsy and forced. There is also not enough outside references. The Kite Runner links seems like you couldn't b bothered thinking of something else (as my teacher says), I would avoid that.

The same problem arises with the conclusion as the last one, "In conclusion...". Again, there is no real problem with expression or writing.
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« Reply #2 on: September 28, 2009, 06:25:17 pm »
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Thanks for that, do u have any examples of what i could talk about? instead of the kite Runner
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« Reply #3 on: September 28, 2009, 07:03:30 pm »
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according to the ESL study design, we are not allowed to use any example from list 1 texts for context writing. if i remember correctly, the Kite Runner falls within list 1?

does the same rule apply for English?

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« Reply #4 on: September 28, 2009, 07:04:44 pm »
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according to the ESL study design, we are not allowed to use any example from list 1 texts for context writing. if i remember correctly, the Kite Runner falls within list 1?

does the same rule apply for English?

wow thanks for that
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« Reply #5 on: September 28, 2009, 07:25:41 pm »
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i'm thinking of talking about the War in Iraq? does anybody have any ideas?
so far i gotten

declared due the 'weapons of mass destruction' when in acutal fact it was for the oil
lead to millions of innocent deaths as a result of America's greed for power and money

any other ideas will also be good

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« Reply #6 on: September 28, 2009, 07:59:45 pm »
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i'm thinking of talking about the War in Iraq? does anybody have any ideas?
so far i gotten

declared due the 'weapons of mass destruction' when in acutal fact it was for the oil
lead to millions of innocent deaths as a result of America's greed for power and money

any other ideas will also be good

Thanks

Everyone talks about iraq/oil/war.
EVERYONE.

according to one of the English teachers at my school, you shouldn't talk about it as there is no actual evidence to show that the reason they attacked Iraq was for the oil.


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« Reply #7 on: September 28, 2009, 08:03:26 pm »
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i'm thinking of talking about the War in Iraq? does anybody have any ideas?
so far i gotten

declared due the 'weapons of mass destruction' when in acutal fact it was for the oil
lead to millions of innocent deaths as a result of America's greed for power and money

any other ideas will also be good

Thanks

Everyone talks about iraq/oil/war.
EVERYONE.

according to one of the English teachers at my school, you shouldn't talk about it as there is no actual evidence to show that the reason they attacked Iraq was for the oil.



i got nothing else :(, do u have any ideas i can talk about?
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Re: Mark my Encountering Conflict essay please
« Reply #8 on: September 28, 2009, 08:05:20 pm »
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I'm not studying conflict, but one thing I did notice with your introduction was that it didn't flow at all. It was just a bunch of really short sentences - almost statements on their own - put together. Try make your intro smoother :)
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« Reply #9 on: September 28, 2009, 09:35:18 pm »
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One of the English lecturers said that some of the best creating and presenting pieces barely mentioned the text, if even at all. Food for thought I guess.

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« Reply #10 on: September 28, 2009, 09:38:29 pm »
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um i thought it is essential that we make direct reference to our selected texts?

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« Reply #11 on: September 28, 2009, 09:43:27 pm »
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Not direct. Implicit.
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« Reply #12 on: September 28, 2009, 09:46:29 pm »
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Your essay must be relevant to your text - it must draw upon the 'ideas' in said text. However, you don't have to make it a black and white relevance. For instance instead of saying "Holden Caulfield has identity issues", you would say "Many adolescents are confronted with issues of identity in their development". Or something to that effect.

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« Reply #13 on: September 28, 2009, 10:06:12 pm »
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One of the English lecturers said that some of the best creating and presenting pieces barely mentioned the text, if even at all. Food for thought I guess.

Cool, I wanted to just refer to the situation but our teachers said you must make direct references to the text.
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« Reply #14 on: September 29, 2009, 10:30:29 am »
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Some of the biggest paralells you could draw on is Stalin's Soviet Union, Pinochet's Chile, Moa's China, Hitler's Germany etc. They are the basic references, but very, very common.
All you really have to do to get unique examples is look in the paper daily, conflict is virtually on every page. Maybe a big court case where someone has been falsely accused? With that prompt Churchill comes to mind, no one really expected him to be able to win the war from all his past failures, his leadership was a somewhat unexpected quality.

Like I said, expository writing is not my strength, I prefer just to write imaginative pieces.
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