Paper 1 Discussion/Suggested Solutions

[maevecouch]

Just asking again would it be alright to say "use of enjambment throughout the poem" or is an example required?

I did that too, it's hard to give an enjambment example

[MisterNeo]

Idk if this was mentioned before, but I used the extensive rhetoric in that “inviting reader” question because it engages the reader’s own beliefs and values, etc.
Hopefully, this technique is suitable.

[adelaidecruz]

I still dont quite understand. I dont have a prepared essay only an essay from my trials. Im using those quotes/techniques/decriptions of quotes for tomorrows exam. Could you go into more indept about how you would 'think about how to emulate and mould essay into the question'. Im happy to talk in private.

Woops sorry, I guess I didn’t read the part where you’re using quotes/techniques instead of a pre-planned base essay for tomorrow! regardless I think you could still look at the past questions for your modules and see if your quotes and techniques are judicious enough in terms of linking/using them for that particular question.. Please PM me if it’s still unclear!

[icedragon66]

Is it ok to say that 'need' isnt that important, whereas both composers provoke a sense of 'curiosity' and 'wonder' to provoke the audiences transformation? My prescribed text was Short History of Nearly Everything, and whilst its great for curiosity and wonder, there isn't much of need.

[16Elias]

guys! I could unfortunately only do two body paragraphs as I ran out of time. i did a conclusion though ended up with around like 4 pages of writing - do you think I'll be penalised? I've done this in trials before and I ended up with a 16/20 for mod b anyways so I'm hoping it's not gonna be that bad ((((

I did one and a half (3 pages) still didnt have enought time to do a conclusion. Timing is so cruital for English, something i looked past. So I dont think you will be penalised if its a proper essay with introduction, body(ies), conclusion. Is 2 detailed parapgrahs enough for each module?? 16/20 for every module is my goal!

[elysepopplewell]

guys! I could unfortunately only do two body paragraphs as I ran out of time. i did a conclusion though ended up with around like 4 pages of writing - do you think I'll be penalised? I've done this in trials before and I ended up with a 16/20 for mod b anyways so I'm hoping it's not gonna be that bad ((((

Number of paragraphs alone isn't an indicator of how you'll perform. Quality over quantity! You're in with a good chance

[adelaidecruz]

I did that too, it's hard to give an enjambment example

Yep giving an example for enjambment would pretty much be writing the whole poem down (or maybe a few stanzas). I personally just wrote “the structure of the poem encapsulates the ..... as the enjambment conveys the ....”

[raeannechamii]

Within the unseen texts although I felt I didn't use any highly advanced techniques, I answered the question to the best of my ability. I did use things like imagery and juxtaposition for the first text. Ellipsis, rhetorical questions and imagery for the second and dashes, imagery, ellipsis  and colloquial language for the fourth. For the 6 marker I honestly just rewrote the same techniques in text 1 and 3 and linked them back to the question.

For section 2, I had a prepared response that I felt worked well and that I just had to adapt -  using the first statement. My story was basically about a girl who is attempting to find the place in which she belongs as all everybody else can see is a facade, from that she is inevitably noticed blah blah and referred to as a 'wonder' in which later provides me with the ability to put in the statement and not have it seem out of place or anything.

For section 3 again a prepared response, my main thesis being that 'discovers can allow individuals to generate new intellectual or emotional perceptions on the world around them'. For the question I just changed it so it would be something like this, "...because of her curiosity, this lesson ultimately enlightens the oblivious character of Scout and allows her to generate new perceptions on the community she is surrounded with."

Do you guys think it'll work because its getting to that point in the night where I seem to be second guessing everything I did in the exam...

[16Elias]

Woops sorry, I guess I didn’t read the part where you’re using quotes/techniques instead of a pre-planned base essay for tomorrow! regardless I think you could still look at the past questions for your modules and see if your quotes and techniques are judicious enough in terms of linking/using them for that particular question.. Please PM me if it’s still unclear!

PM'd you!  

[mjorfian]

I did one and a half (3 pages) still didnt have enought time to do a conclusion. Timing is so cruital for English, something i looked past. So I dont think you will be penalised if its a proper essay with introduction, body(ies), conclusion. Is 2 detailed parapgrahs enough for each module?? 16/20 for every module is my goal!

Hey, yeah. Totally. For my module A response I have 2 detailed body paragraphs (around 800-850 words with a conclusion) and I've used them throughout the year and gotten 18/20 every time. Given that you have a strong introduction and a good argument that flows, it's definitely enough. Give it a go if you're struggling with time management but make sure what you have is well written

Number of paragraphs alone isn't an indicator of how you'll perform. Quality over quantity! You're in with a good chance

thanks elyse! that makes me feel a bit better ahaha, I just spent too much time on short answer because they were challenging and definitely needed more than the anticipated 30 minutes that I'd planned. Guess all we can do now is just wait. Gahhhh.

[16Elias]

Hey, yeah. Totally. For my module A response I have 2 detailed body paragraphs (around 800-850 words with a conclusion) and I've used them throughout the year and gotten 18/20 every time. Given that you have a strong introduction and a good argument that flows, it's definitely enough. Give it a go if you're struggling with time management but make sure what you have is well written

Awesome!! Do you recon i could get a look at them?

[JD99]

There didn't seem to be any particular 'theme' to this paper....i thought there usually was? Made it a bit more difficult to get my head around, but didn't matter much...

[justwannawish]

Oh, no, I didn't think that we needed to talk explicitly about curiosity and wonder! I did mention it a couple of times but I thought it was the transforming part that we had to focus on (but I did say what it transformed)!

[icedragon66]

Oh, no, I didn't think that we needed to talk explicitly about curiosity and wonder! I did mention it a couple of times but I thought it was the transforming part that we had to focus on (but I did say what it transformed)!

Yeah my essay just happened to be really good for wonder, but it seems really tough to include all three with a high level of detail.

[Olivia Mckeowk]

I do Wrack as well and an Iranian film as a related and for the essay I went along the lines of

Body Paragraph 1: something along the lines of = one's curiosity and wonder is influenced by the culturally-hegemonic beliefs of their society which tailor the motivations and outcomes of their discoveries
- I talk about the role of cultural consensus in dictating what curiosity is permissible / allowed to prosper
- How individual's tailor their language to culturally-hegemonic beliefs to make their wonder/curiosity more palatable

Body Paragraph 2: something along the lines of = discoveries motivated by personal necessity accompany a significant degree of personal meaning which can translate into an individual's inability to take on new perspectives and undergo transformation
- I talked about how both of my texts are Post Modern and influenced by nihilism, as seen in the characterisation of their Protagonists
- I offered examples of scenes where the protagonists had deeply invested in their personal necessity to discover and that they were unwilling to take on new perspectives, offering examples of interactions with children which are the superlative definition of imagination and thus how this contrasted with their worldview which was narrowed and less romantic

Body Paragraph 3: (this was really short, the others had been really long) Both composers agree that the process of discovery is more significant than one's cathartic, desired outcome
- with this point I was pretty much talking about how the transformative properties of discovery live on in audience interpretation
- I talked about the end of both texts which are inherently self-reflexive

I felt like I rushed it and my expression wasn't as clear as I wanted it to be. I am also worried about legibility and my introduction was not the perfect structure I usually used as I had to adapt it, but I am trying to leave it in the past now and focus on tomorrow. Section I and Section II were fine I think, I did the first extract for my creative and mentioned snippets throughout, then the whole phrase was integrated into my protagonist's speech.