Film analysis paragraph

[HighSchoolerRS]

Hi guys,
This is my analysis of the opening scene of Picnic at Hanging Rock and was hoping I could get some feedback on it since I am intending to write something like this for my upcoming practice test (we are only required to write one paragraph).
Thank you!

The opening scene of Picnic at Hanging Rock is a lamentation, by Peter Weir, of the social construction of gender. The viewal of the film from a feminist point of view involves uncovering the power imbalances between men and women. The repression of people of people due to their gender is highlighted and criticised. Initially, Miranda, an archetypal colonial beauty, seems to be moribund in a funereal pose. However, there is still a close up of her face, bathed in light, which is used to not only emphasise her beauty but also sexualise it. Through this, Weir implies that the leering gaze of society and men is never removed from women, even when it is this gaze that has dehumanised and reduced the woman to a mere body that pleases them. The ritualised morning toilette is further demonstrative of the harsh institutions of gender that pressurised women into turning their bodies into something perfect and in the process overlook the beauty of their soul. Through the multitude of mirrors present within the scenes, Weir hints at the notion that beauty is merely an illusion that is constructed and enforced onto the girls from a young age. However, through the scattered placement of the mirrors, Weir alludes to the complex and three dimensional nature of females for there can be more than one realm and reality than that is seen from the typical, dehumanising male gaze. Yet this realisation is evidently not known to those in the Victorian Era as they continue to oppress individuals. The corseting of the girls encapsulates the generic persona – one that fits a rigid mould – that society expected females to embrace. Implied within this and through the jarring sounds associated with the scene is not only the mental trauma that is caused but also the physical harm as women are suffocated in an attempt to become socially acceptable. The pressing of the rose also promulgates the notion that women are actually living creatures whose intricacies and fundamental identity is squashed until they become mere ornaments whose livelihood and beauty has been extracted. Weir invites the viewer to consider whether being deemed acceptable by patriarchal societies is a gift or a punishment for it robs individuals of their identity and humanity and turns them into shells that exist for the appeasement of others. Contained within the scene is a harsh criticism of those that cause such pain to humans, and particularly females, which serves as an indictment of Victorian society and their austere social structures.