AOS Creative Writing

[zanibalh]

hey

[theyam]

Hey guys,
This is my creative writing for AOS;
my teacher told me I should consider another storyline because she doesn't know how HSC markers will respond to it.

I just want your opinions.

Thankyou!

Hello,

Just had a read of your creative and I had to read it a couple of times to try and understand what it is you wrote about. Is this someone in the afterlife recounting how they committed suicide from self-poison? Your story is very metaphorical and your language looks similar to the styles I've seen in Extension 2 creatives. So in that sense, I think in terms of just looking at the quality of your story its pretty good But I think in terms for a HSC Advanced AOS marker audience, I think you might want to consider creating a storyline that is more accessible and has a discovery that is portrayed in a more literal manner (like as in a real life situation rather than a fantasy based setting?) My teacher said to keep in mind, that if by bad luck your story might be the last paper that your marker intends to look at, at the end of their long shift and if they can't understand it in the first go that's not really the best situation. So maybe create a story that is less metaphorical? It's a shame that we have to be creative but with all these restrictions ;-;

good luck