Context: Identity and Belonging

[magnum]

Definitely not as straightforward as I hoped as it was quite difficult not 2 stray from the prompt (e.g. you had to keep referring back to "greatest achievements")

I think I am the only person who disagreed with the prompt lol

So how did everyone else find it?

[PepsiMax]

I thought it was one of the most difficult prompts I have come across this year.

I often found myself going over the same points.

My topic sentences were all different but I ended up finding myself at the same point as my paragraphs grew.

I think my topic sentences were along the lines of:

- We can't be satisfied if we are forced to belong to group.

- Teenagers and children have the most impressionable minds.

- the purpose of life is to discover who we truly are - our life is fulfilled when we obtain this.

[kendraaaaa]

I wrote about the following:

The implications of sacrificing uniqueness in order to belong (through conformity)
The consequences associated with sacrificing belonging in order to remain "true to yourself"

For each point I wrote about the advantages and disadvantages involved. My introduction was fu***ng horrible, but I think I saved myself in the body and conclusion.

[jaja]

i agreed and disagreed with the prompt

[PepsiMax]

i wrote:
- individuals get rewarded for being true to their selves
- communities get rewarded for upholding their beliefs.
- However, exceptions exist


does mine sound correct?

Sounds good.

Could you elaborate further on your final paragraph? It sounds interesting.

[kendraaaaa]

i wrote:
- individuals get rewarded for being true to their selves
- communities get rewarded for upholding their beliefs.
- However, exceptions exist


does mine sound correct?

Sounds good but I'm just wondering what you wrote about on the second point? It sounds interesting, care to elaborate?

edit: hahaha nice.

[monokekie]

um .

to be honest

i ran out of examples

so i wrote on Amisth.......T_T; yes, that one only

not sure whether its sufficient to demonstrate my point

GAH

[dejan91]

Meh. I didn't like the prompt.

I wrote:
- Remaining true to yourself need not mean abstaining from group company.
- On the contrary, being in groups which you deny yourself is detrimental. It's hard to rid yourselves of such groups.
- Thus, being true to yourself and finding a group to which you entirely assimilate to is the greatest challenge of all. For this reason, it is the greatest achievement (and also mentioned the positives of belonging to such a group).

Sound like it was on track with the prompt??

[magnum]

Meh. I didn't like the prompt.

I wrote:
- Remaining true to yourself need not mean abstaining from group company.
- On the contrary, being in groups which you deny yourself is detrimental. It's hard to rid yourselves of such groups.
- Thus, being true to yourself and finding a group to which you entirely assimilate to is the greatest challenge of all. For this reason, it is the greatest achievement (and also mentioned the positives of belonging to such a group).

Sound like it was on track with the prompt??

I took a similar approach, using "Catcher" as an example. Hopefully it relates to the prompt   

[dejan91]

Meh. I didn't like the prompt.

I wrote:
- Remaining true to yourself need not mean abstaining from group company.
- On the contrary, being in groups which you deny yourself is detrimental. It's hard to rid yourselves of such groups.
- Thus, being true to yourself and finding a group to which you entirely assimilate to is the greatest challenge of all. For this reason, it is the greatest achievement (and also mentioned the positives of belonging to such a group).

Sound like it was on track with the prompt??

I took a similar approach, using "Catcher" as an example. Hopefully it relates to the prompt   

The only risky thing was that it was a build up to the contention.

What form did you write it in?

Mine was a "Self-Help" tape. i.e. persuasive

[magnum]

haha "self-help" tape lol,

i just did expository

The only risky thing was that it was a build up to the contention.

what do you mean by this?

[kendraaaaa]

Anyone care to shed a few words of criticism on my plan which I mentioned in a couple of posts above?
Cheers.

[dejan91]

Haha yeah. Had an inspirational hypothetical in it too. and no it wasn't a spur of the moment thing, I'd done many before today

Well, I'm saying that I structured my argument in a way that my contention (you know, as it was a persuasive piece) wasn't clear until midway- 3/4's of the way through the piece. So I'm scared that the first half might not relate to the prompt or answer it as well as it should. But then again, I guess that's the basis of a 'prompt' - it's a springboard and not an essay topic that you rigorously answer/argue in every sentence. Right? (I think... )

[dejan91]

Kendra, that sounds similar to what I talked about. Did you mention something about 'greatest achievement' or whatever?

[PepsiMax]

Did everyone do 3 body paragraphs?