Writing an English Advanced Module A Essay

[zoe_rammie]

Hi The-Cambridge-Student!

If you don't mind, and if it's not too much of a hassle, could you please post the rest of this essay?
It's absolutely excellent, and I'm sure I'm not the only one who wants to see how the rest of it unfolds. 

(If you can't though, it's okay )

Thank you!

[marynguyen18]

Hey Elyse i was wondering if this was a better thesis statement for the introduction for P&P and LTA "Challenges have been explored in the texts to allow society to gain a better understanding of themselves and the way their lives have been shaped and reshaped over time."

[MCgunem]

Nice, thanks!

[elysepopplewell]

Hey Elyse i was wondering if this was a better thesis statement for the introduction for P&P and LTA "Challenges have been explored in the texts to allow society to gain a better understanding of themselves and the way their lives have been shaped and reshaped over time."

Being picky: Society and themselves. It doesn't really make sense unless you're talking about several societies looking inwardly at themselves. Perhaps, "individuals in society" works better?

[marynguyen18]

Being picky: Society and themselves. It doesn't really make sense unless you're talking about several societies looking inwardly at themselves. Perhaps, "individuals in society" works better?

thank you Elyse

[imtrying]

Just hoping for a bit of feedback on my thesis? Thanks:)

Spoiler

A pivotal aspect of literature and media which transcends the decades of human society is its employment on behalf of composers in making a statement or issuing a warning relevant to the context and values of their audience. By means of drawing on concerns of their time in gaining insights in relation to perceived issues within their societal view, authors adeptly address similar topics, the treatment of which vary due to differing conflict and form. George Orwell’s Nineteen Eighty-Four (hereafter 1984) and Fritz Lang’s Metropolis are no exception, as both take advantage of distinct textual forms in presenting the nature and pitfalls of social control. Through analysis of Orwell’s use of dystopic novel and Lang’s utilization of the expressionist film genre, it is possible to examine these differing representations of social control.

[jamonwindeyer]

Just hoping for a bit of feedback on my thesis? Thanks:)

Sure!

A pivotal aspect of literature and media which transcends the decades of human society is its employment on behalf of composers in making a statement or issuing a warning relevant to the context and values of their audience. This is a great concept/idea, but the expression is a little long winded. In general, if you can do something in less words, you should. By means of drawing on concerns of their time in gaining insights in relation to perceived issues within their societal view, authors adeptly address similar topics, the treatment of which vary due to differing conflict and form. Good. George Orwell’s Nineteen Eighty-Four (hereafter 1984) and Fritz Lang’s Metropolis are no exception, as both take advantage of distinct textual forms in presenting the nature and pitfalls of social control. I'd like you to go into these ideas here a little more; set up a stronger conceptual basis. Through analysis of Orwell’s use of dystopic novel and Lang’s utilization of the expressionist film genre, it is possible to examine these differing representations of social control. What do we get by comparing them TOGETHER? Be sure to hit the comparative element

[imtrying]

Thanks so much! 

[MarkThor]

Hi guys, do we need to split our 2 paragraphs on each of the two texts into 2 separate values/ideas that are present in both texts i.e. one paragraph for metropolis & 1984 on control, then another paragraph for each of them on oppression?

[elysepopplewell]

Hi guys, do we need to split our 2 paragraphs on each of the two texts into 2 separate values/ideas that are present in both texts i.e. one paragraph for metropolis & 1984 on control, then another paragraph for each of them on oppression?

You totally can do that, and it sounds like a great idea! But it isn't "need"ed

[MarkThor]

Ok cool thanks Elyse

[Thebarman]

Hey guys, any tips for integrating context, and how often it should be addressed in an essay?

[jamonwindeyer]

Hey guys, any tips for integrating context, and how often it should be addressed in an essay?

Hey! Context is most effective when you can spot something in the text that is reflective of the context. For example;

The composer's background in advertising is clearly evident in the complex mise en scenes of the world space he has manufactured, epitomised by ___________.

So I've taken an element of context, and linked it to a technique in the movie (for the record, this is Blade Runner). Another example for Shelley's Frankenstein:

Shelley appeals to her predominately Christian audience through quasi-religious imagery, as the protagonists quest to "obtain a niche in the temple" becomes representative of their own ambitions and desires, thus _________.

That time I specified how the technique appealed to the contextual audience. This is the sort of thing Band 6 responses do

In terms of importance, it is extremely important for this Module. The whole idea of Module A is to compare texts across contexts, and how context shapes representation. So, it should play a pivotal role, probably mentioned multiple times within a paragraph (but it depends what you do with it) definitely though, a brief mention once per paragraph won't quite cut it for Module A

[kb123]

Hi!

I was wondering for 1984 and Metropolis, which theme would be better: Technology or lack of individuality? The other theme I am doing is rebellion.

Thanks

[RuiAce]

Hi!

I was wondering for 1984 and Metropolis, which theme would be better: Technology or lack of individuality? The other theme I am doing is rebellion.

Thanks

From a personal viewpoint, having studied the texts, it would be the latter. Simply because it looks like more convincing arguments could be put out for it.

In reality, your actual points won't matter as much as the quality of your analysis. If you can analyse technology BETTER than lack of individuality, then that decides your answer immediately (go for the former).