Hey
I am still really confused on how I should create points in response to an AOS essay question. I am planning to memorise my essay for the HSC so I am aiming to make my 3 points as adaptable as possible. My text is Go Back to where you came from.
I started off with 3 thematic points (identity, truth, hope).
I then changed my points to 1. how an environment stimulates discovery, 2. how discoveries can challenge an individual's perception, 3. how discoveries can affirm an individual's perception. I did this for trials but the feedback I got was to explore the beginning, process and impacts of the discoveries on the participants.
After trials, I changed my structure to 1. how an environment stimulates discovery ( I discussed the pre packaged introductions of Adam and Raye), 2. the emotional/physical process of discovery (I discussed key scenes such as Masudi family, immigration raids) and 3. The transformative impacts of discovery (changing perspectives of Raye and Adam). However, my teacher suggested that I shouldn't just talk about the prepackaged introductions in one paragraph. She said I should also include their discoveries and show how the discoveries change the participant's beliefs from their introductory videos.
So now I am thinking of changing my points to 1. the transformation of an individual's perception towards themselves, 2. the transformation of an individual's attitude towards others and i am still thinking of a third point.
What is your suggestion on how I should create three, easily adaptable points?
Thanks for your help!