Hi !! Would you be able to read through my creative and provide some feedback please ! Thank you !!!
No Longer StolenPriya and I sweltered as we drew squares on the crumbled street and numbered them with the stolen chalk. We played lagoori with a pile of stones and a dirt-covered plastic ball. Each day, the streets crumbled some more, but the chalk was always stolen and the stones were always free.
***
We run, further and further. The woods darkening, as if night came in seconds. Twigs scraped past my face, entangling themselves into my hair. My feet slip and I’m falling. I can’t open my voice to scream, fear, paralysing my body. I’m falling down. Down. Down. Down. I hit solid ground.
“Go Priya! They won’t find me here. Find another place and I’ll come get you.”
Minutes have passed. I can no longer hear the crunch of dried twigs or the rustling of leaves. Looking for a makeshift foothold, I hoist myself up, climbing up the side of the ditch like we would climb the Banyan tree.
“Priya! Priya!” I call out as I run.
A tiny red-brick cottage, with windows no larger than a sheet of tabloid newspaper, stands skeletal, a crumbling beauty of an era long past. An enormous Banyan tree stands overshadowing the cottage, its spreading branching hiding it from the rest of the world.
“Priya! Priya!”
She steps out of the darkness of the house and into the light of the setting sun.
“I think the boys gave up. Let’s go home.”
“They are terrible at hide and seek.”
“Well, we have an advantage now,” Priya tilts her head and raises her eyebrows at me, “This house.”
Laughing, we run back to our homes.
“Myra, let’s come back tomorrow.”
***
My mother’s cold palm wakes me.
“Namaste. Welcome to India.” The stewardess smiles.
A sea of faces moves like an unseen current towards the terminal building. Eyes of elderly women in saris glare at me and become more horrified as they take in my sleeveless midriff top and my denim mini skirt.
A few withering trees cast small pathetic patches of shade onto the baked tarmac.
“Mum! How long are we here for again?”
“Mother! Esha! Are you even listen--?”
“STOP IT, Myra! You were born and raised here for SIX YEARS! Can’t you stop complaining for just six weeks?”
Why did she always bring that up? We left ten year ago. We are Australians now.
I reach for my phone to call for an UBER before I realise. Instead, I stick out my tired hand in hope for a SUV with leather seats and air conditioning. What do I get instead? A metal cabin on three wheels. I reach for the seat belt. None. I clutch my mother’s arm. The rickshaw stalls, brakes abruptly and lets out a plume of grey smoke which consumes the vehicle. I watch the local children giggle as they draw hopscotch grids with chalk. I tell mum to go ahead without me.
“I think I want to explore a little.”
I couldn’t, for the life of me, recall the street on which the small cottage stood but I attempt to describe it to my rickshaw driver. She wouldn’t be able to get it. She smiles, nods and starts the motor again.
As the rickshaw rumbles on, the crowded streets start to resemble those that I once knew.
The old place now looks just a little more glorified than a shed. I place my hand on the Banyan tree, my fingertips gripping into deepening crevices.
“I can’t believe how long it’s been.”
“Me neither.”
What does she…? Who…? For the first time, I pay attention to the approaching rickshaw driver. Her frame says she is eighteen or nineteen years old, but she looks much older. She stands with one hip jutted to one side, her right arm draped across her slender body, clasping the other elbow. A deep curve begins to form on her lips and precious dimples…no way!
“It’s me. Priya.” She laughs.
Before I could breathe, I melt into her form. Her hands fold around my back and draw me closer. I feel my body shake.
“Oh my god! How…where…. what have you been up to?”
Priya paces uneasily and then sits down on the ground, beside me. She recounts her recent plight and laments her brief foolish relationship with Raj – the curiosity of our childhood – who had decided she wasn’t what he wanted after they had run away. She spoke in a soft tone, as if someone would hear and hurt her. But then, when Priya returned, it was to an empty house. Her parents couldn’t live with the shame. How could they do that? Leave her…? Mum would never give up on me. As she continued her story, I couldn’t help but stare at the scars on her neck and arms. Priya rolled down her sleeves and hunched further. I pulled her closer to me and that was when she started weeping into my shoulder.
“Hey, hey, it’s going to be okay.” I reassured her.
I feel so much at ease with Priya. Sitting there, beside the Banyan tree I envisage my past. I don’t despise the weather. I don’t get irritated with the unique aromas. I am six-years-old again!
I reach for her hand.
“Promise me, when you can, you will come to Australia.”
*****
She presses her face to the plane’s window as it touches the tarmac. The airport looks like a shopping mall with gleaming white tiles. Two glass elevators lift simultaneously, leading to the upper floor food court. The air is cool with a faint aroma of sausages and bacon which drifts from above. In the middle of many large open areas are white fabric covered seats. Priya walks past a group of girls in short skirts and crop tops and boys with only board shorts. They smile at her. She walks towards the chalk in a stationary store.
“$3.00”